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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-07-24 09:17 AM

His love for her could never be enough.
She would never come to be at his side.
He thought he might be made of stronger stuff.
Why did she have to be another's bride?

They met by chance over the Internet.
Love of poetry brought them much closer.
The thought of her was too much to forget.
She wrecked through his heart like a Bulldozer.

To end this dull ache, he thought of the knife.
He thought of a bullet shot through his brain.
Would he have the courage to take his life?
How could he stand to go through that again?

He felt echoes of his apathy stir.
It felt like the best way to forget her.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-24-99).]

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-07-24 09:25 AM

Women, huh? hehehehe Can't live with'em, can't live without'em...

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

2 posted 1999-07-24 11:23 AM

Well done,brother of my heart....I loved it

quote99
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since 1999-07-14

Posts 17
US

3 posted 1999-07-24 11:44 AM

Again, well written. But are you advocating suecide because of a lost love on the internet? Sounds immature to me.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-07-24 03:04 PM

I do not advocate anything.

thursdayschild
Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

5 posted 1999-07-24 03:16 PM

quote99, I believe your comment on maturity
is totally out of place here. The poet is
expressing some deep pain, and your lack
of understanding the emotion is apparent.
Please refrain from attacking the character
of a poet, it is not constructive at all.
Leave your remarks regarding the poem,
that's what this is about...
I apologize for the diatribe under your poem
Dear Sir....great work.

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

6 posted 1999-07-24 09:58 PM

This one as well as Dark Sonnet2 are painfully sad, yet written once again with obvious talent. Keep up the great work, my friend.

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*Krista Knutson*

"It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-07-25 01:20 AM

Thanks you two.

Blackdrake
Member

since 1999-07-23

Posts 83
Depends on the day :)

8 posted 1999-07-25 02:17 AM

Most excellent.

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Thy own Darkness shall conquer the Light

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

9 posted 1999-07-25 12:48 PM

I thought so too, my new friend.

Ominous
Member

since 1999-07-04

Posts 68
Canada

10 posted 1999-07-26 03:52 AM

Dream you never cease to amaze me. You have such a talent for poetry.
You have a nac for describing heartache, I sense you have been there.

Another fabulous piece my dear friend.

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I am but a shadow, lost within this world of darkness

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