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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can't know if your looks are hot But, sweet Elvira, plain you're not! Anyone can plainly see Your beauty in your poetry. Your eyes MUST sparkle with your wit. I'm sure your mouth turns up a bit. Your nose is not stuck in the air. I sense the softness in your hair. With all of these strong qualities I pity men who cannot see That lines may always look quite plain.. The beauty is what they contain. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Balladeer said it best. Trust me, I've been there. Excellent poem, it captures the feeling well. Keep up the great work!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "It's a crazy thing, fate has perfect wings..."-Deanna Carter |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
There is no such thing as perfect, for everyone's definition would be different. I would describe you as gifted, and that makes you special. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Delores Hall Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 342USA |
Wonderful writing Elvira. Unfortunately this is sometimes true. But for every person there is someone out there.And that is all that matters. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I did not see it as a self-pity poem, I saw it as a down to earth description of an average person looking for a little more gratification in their life. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Crystal Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 62Hazel Park Mi U.S.A. |
Wow! I am a new member but, I have read quite a few of your poems. You are really gifted! I hope to see many more in the future. |
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heides New Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 6 |
I understand about it not being self-pity. And you are speaking from my heart, too. Like a cry to heaven, "why?" and who can we blame? Men are made the way they are made, they did not choose it any more than we did. Are we to blame God (He did it!)? Cosmo (airbrushing...grrrrrrr!)? Ourselves for lying about our weight, age, etc (confusing to the poor dears, you know)? Women are always seen as in competition with each other...we are not. Just in competition with the ideal. Which we can never match. Want to hear something really ironic? In doing what we are here for, we make ourselves less attractive (childbirth, nuff said, huh?), for a man it is the opposite. Sad but true. And how's that for fair? |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
So incredibly touching and sadly so true for so many of us. Very well done Sweet Lady. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Perfect you'll not be Nor either will I Perfection means nothing Here under God's sky But unbridled passion And one's loyal soul Are always in fashion And always my goal Love everything that's good... sandman |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Such a lovely poem! And the image it produces is also apealing. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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CastleHoward Junior Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 20 |
There is a saying, is there not, that beauty is in the eye of the beholder? For no one is plain... and everyone is special in someone else's eyes... and the charlatans in the glamour press that promote "perfect beauty" are fools, for there is no such thing. No, elvira, plain you are not, for though none of us has ever seen you, your beauty lies in your words... the brain sees what the eyes do not -- the most important of all -- the inner beauty and attraction of the mind |
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poohbear Junior Member
since 1999-08-02
Posts 42piedmont,sc |
its obvoius your poam is not speaking of self pity and that from your words comes your beauty as for the net it serves its purpose well and supplies to so many just what they need for when iwas lonely it worked for me not one to care what others say i found a girl on here and now she is my fiance so take pride in who you are and now you have a great gift and great friends |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
Men who only want to be with a woman for her looks aren't worth having, anyway. This is a poem written by someone strong, and extremely well written, too. Good stuff, Elvira! |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
With perfection, would come boredom. I see in you elvira, anything BUT a plain woman. I realize this wasn't a self-pity poem, but this is a subject I feel very strongly about! I agree that a good portion of it stems from the media (may they burn in hades!) I think the true "plain" people, are those who satisfy themselves, seeking the ideal dream. And what is a dream, if not something that is unreal. For me, I would be happy with a crone (according to their standards) who had a mind that was sharp, and a good sense of humor! Much better that, then an empty shell of physical beauty. 'Cause what do we do with the things we buy that are pretty? We put them on the wall, or a shelf, nary to think of them again. ------------------ It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell! -Psychotica- |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Perfection is high over-rated. It's all the little imperfections that make a person interesting. Nice poem. (nice shape).. how'd you do that? (smile) ------------------ Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Great Poem....I saw not self pitty but self love and pitty (or sadness) for those who "buy into" the shallow end of the pool! You are very gifted. I love real things when they are said "plainly".. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sorry Elvira, I never got to comment on this wonderful poem I can only add a haikoo I once wrote Illusions Like the desert rose Whatever the conditions Continues to bloom. |
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Terri Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 82Turtle Creek, PA |
I agree with red...not only do I like the poem but the shape pleases me too. A jewel within a jewel, perhaps? |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
elvira Besides the poem being very nice, I loved the way you controlled the lines to make that round figure in the middle of the screen. How did you do that? Incidently, I like well-rounded poetry *g*. |
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Carolina Girl Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 63 |
Elvira, don't be jealous of the models...when they're 60 or 70 years old...a majority of them won't have ANYTHING! I'd rather be plain in looks and beautiful with personality, spirit, and loving ways, than to be beautiful, vain, and looked at often without others knowing the REAL me. (the ME on the inside!) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
elvira Yeah! What Car Girl said! When those 20-year old models are 60 and 70 they won't have anything! Including ME! I'll be way long gone by then! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Have to say I loved this! As for the net, elvira, they just get to see you for who you really are. They get to see the inside first. And that's what counts! Great job!!! |
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juanita Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 68Los Angeles, CA, USA |
Elvira, i loved your poem, i am glad some- one brought it back from July's pile. you are very talented. Every morning when you wake up after giving thanks for another beautiful day. You are going to think beautiful and you are going to feel beautiful in the end that's what counts! |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Poetic Lovely Amiable Intelligent Nurturing elvira: love the poem! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A lot of women think men don't look at them, but there are men that are too shy to! They see those beauties slaying men with putdowns and killing looks and become fearful! I've read most of your poetry and think you have a perfection of inner beauty that glows in your work!  |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Beautiful work Elvira...This is something I could so well relate to...But I swear I couldn't have expressed it so well... ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr |
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DarkChiild Junior Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 18 |
Perfection is unattainable, and impossible. Just be who you are, and ppl will like you for you. For this same reason I don't like make-up. Part of what makes a person beautiful is their flaws, but covering those flaws, you cover your beauty... If men can't see beyond physical beauty which is only skin deep, they don't deserve you or any other self-respecting woman. ------------------ Wish in one hand, then shit in the other and see which one fills up first. --DarkChiild-- |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
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