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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-07-20 01:56 AM

Perhaps this is the last verse
I will ever write,
I'm tired of being derided,
called weak and uninspired.
My verse is considered jaded,
boring, and trite.

I think I am right in returning
to the burning pleasures of the Night,
therein lies the delight
that drew me with my yearning.

Hate keeps me alive,
safe and warm,
Within the arms of vengeance
that never relents
or parts
the tapestry of me.

I open my eyes to
what blinded me before,
I found to my sorrow
That all the reasons
That made me flee,
Where there,
staring back at me.

Against this fate
I will not wail and curse,
Just put to paper
this final verse.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

1 posted 1999-07-20 01:59 AM

o no you dont i drag you by the ear from the depths of hell never ever will dream have a dry inkwell!!!!

elvira
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since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

2 posted 1999-07-20 01:59 AM

don't you dare stop writing...not because of some self-appointed critic
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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...

[This message has been edited by elvira (edited 07-20-99).]

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

3 posted 1999-07-20 02:02 AM

I once again agree with elvira. You are much to talented to stop...use those words, for you are blessed with the gift.

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..And down from the eternal heavens comes fate's jewelled fingertips, it's magic flowing into awaiting souls..--Krista Knutson

*Krista Knutson*

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

4 posted 1999-07-20 02:51 AM

Absolutely BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!! But yeah, you better not stop writing...

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

JP
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

5 posted 1999-07-20 02:52 AM

To quit in the face of adversity...... tis the shame of cowards and wannabe's... While I can make no claim to your talent, I can call attention to your potential. Do the world, and yourself a favor and quit the whinning and beging the creating.... add beauty to this world in the form of verse, both dark and lovely.

Either that, or quit, without the sorry swan song.

Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

6 posted 1999-07-20 03:29 AM

You think so do you? Not a chance my friend...this Dragon's claws will not let you escape.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-07-20 03:38 AM

Sorry to say this, but some seem to have a problem distinguishing between fantasy and reality. Perhaps, they should try expressing themselves, venting to be rid of an unwanted emotion.

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

8 posted 1999-07-20 07:33 AM

You have a wonderful talent with the written word, and the creative ways to use them. Like I said in a previous response I don't really like dark writing, but let me tell you this, you have a way of writing it with the right touch and that is a gift. Please keep your pen filled with ink, and our eyes inspired with your skill.

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

9 posted 1999-07-20 09:32 AM

We all know he cannot stop writing.....for if he is like us..........writing is like breathing, we cannot stop it and expect to live for very long.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

10 posted 1999-07-20 09:14 PM

Exactly right, Saxoness.

Ohme
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 816
Texas

11 posted 1999-07-20 09:19 PM

If he ever stops writing, somebody go check on him. He would have to be sick.

Keep it commin'

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

12 posted 1999-07-21 03:26 AM

Of course, dear Lady.

thursdayschild
Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

13 posted 1999-12-14 01:26 AM

jaded, boring, trite?
Adjectives one could never associate with
your work!
Great poem.

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