Loss of Light-being put in my place

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Loss of Light-being put in my place

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-07-15 12:14 PM

Violence and vengeance, rage hate and pain, have become my litany again.

Suffering and loving are never far apart, a woman today took away my heart.

By random chat a poetess arrived to help me while away my time by trading rhyme.

For posting her verse, she had a single fear, someone stealing it, I said, Oh dear.

From the moment you write it, the copyright's intact, that my dear is a solemn fact.

She took my ear, then bent it clear to here. Told me off for calling her dear. "If I ask for special treatment, then you can give it to me. Until then, don't feel the need to talk down to me. I'm a smart girl"
It spun me in a whirl.

Why be honest and why be frank when common courtesy draws a blank or worse a comment that's rank?

Common courtesy is a dime store fantasy, a thing you shake out when you cannot do without
Agony.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Gentle Soul
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since 1999-07-12

Posts 273
Vinton,Ohio USA

1 posted 1999-07-15 12:17 PM

nice... *hugs* she will move on.. dont worry about it Dream.. youre very sweet.. and only trying to help

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~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

2 posted 1999-07-15 03:52 PM

Very good work! However, I don't believe that calling someone "dear" is talking down to them, or giving them special treatment. I think calling someone "dear" is a nice way of letting someone know that they are dear to you. Don't fret... she will go on.

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~one voice~
*You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.*

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

3 posted 1999-07-15 04:50 PM

Thank you

thursdayschild
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since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

4 posted 1999-12-14 01:17 AM

Oh Dear!
I love your honesty...don't change.

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