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Open Poetry #1

Imaginary World

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 1999-07-19 05:38 PM

Imaginary World

You attempt to serve me
melted poison ice cream
on a disposable candy spoon.
You terrorize me
with your cynical smile.
I shiver frightfully
unaware of my pending doom.

Lost in my imaginary world
where flightless bodies
seem to soar above me,
where visions on the TV screen
enter my world as reality,
where I analyze you like a robot
trying to program you to respond,
where as everyday passes
I fall deeper into my imaginary world.

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

1 posted 1999-07-19 08:14 PM

this one was interesting......not really sure of the subject......

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 1999-07-19 10:35 PM

There's something about this poem that I really like. Can't put my finger on it.. it's not the usual type of poetry I like. I guess it's like a Stephen King novel....

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

3 posted 1999-07-20 06:36 AM

Thanks for the reply Saxoness, & Poet deVine
Now I will explain I wrote this about my Father-in-law who was on morphine due to terminal cancer. I wrote it in his perspective, but the way I was seeing it and feeling it at the time. I happen to be the lucky one to be without a job at the time, so I was the one there to jump at his commands. It was only 3 months, but felt like a year.

Starfish
Junior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 34
New Zealand

4 posted 1999-07-20 06:50 AM

I really like this poem - it grabs me as it drifts from reality into the imagination. It sounds like it was a hard time for you by your father's side and I admire you for standing by him.

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

5 posted 1999-07-20 05:29 PM

Thank-You Starfish, I really appreciate your thoughts.

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