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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
A window, A window within a wall. Outside the sun shines. I gather the air is cold. I sit here motionless and naked. The outer world seemed naked too. But, it is carefully painted by color. How I wish my skin had color. I blink... The window is gone. The wall stood tall. The glass had fallen. The air struck upon my face. I walked to the window, naked. I caught a glimpse of the outside. I stood upon the cill and started to learn forward. Silently I floated down. Again I blinked... I never touched the ground. [This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-22-99).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
mysteriously amused, very good you've captured my mind with this one. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
After editing this I realized there was something missing...I would love some feedback! blueloon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
There's really nothing "missing", you just force the reader to use his/her imagination as to what exactly has happened here!! Very deep thoughts you have - and you forced me to think too!! It's so vague yet it's not. Stimulating...mentally. ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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