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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I used to dream a child's dream, of being a knight and rescuing ladies from their plight. Daydreams are like moonbeams, pale reflections of what we want to be. Childhood was agony. Dreams brought me pain in two ways, the pain of being alone, unheard, the pain of being stoned by casually callous words. Why I view females so, when all they did was spit at me, I'll never know. I held the same desires, the same soul, my need quenched the same fires, leaving me unwhole as they laughed at my need, fed on my pain, watched me bleed then took turns kicking my broken dreams, or so it seems. Why should I cherish women so? They hated me, berated me, called me to task for things I knew not how to ask. Most of the rage and pain I try to contain in vain came from them. Discipline became my mantra, my oath and code. Coldhearted became my operating mode in the depths of my soul where rages a howling storm of numbing cold. I HATE them for what they did to me, a simple soul yearning to be free, yet women were also the source of every concern that I spurned to protect my hollow fate from decay. My heart would ache as I did contemplate the romantic attraction that left me out, scarred and marred by the hard reality of being a pariah, unclean and fit only for females to demean. There are times when I look back on me, and scarcely see, how I survived being so scarred up inside, from endlessly weeping about their callous disregard that has broken me ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
tiz always treat to be first responder to a poem o yurs lemme say women who neeeds em I dooooooo but yuh twas a time when they were so mean to me never stopped chasin em tho....love it you simply must post more  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oops used wifes name twas supposed be me sayin that |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
But broken, dear Dream, you are not, for I know you have come to see that you cannot judge a group as a whole. In every being there is the ability for Goodness, and in all of us the desire to seek again when our wounded pride and broken hearts have left us empty. Yet still I see your pain, and understand your words, and change the tone of female to male, you will have echoed my own stories in some way close to the same as yours. Well Done, you made me react, and that is the best gift a writer can give! ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
OOO...I want to scoop you up and hug you! I do so love this! You said I wouldn't. But I do. You are so talented-I wish you could see that.  ------------------ ~one voice~ *You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.* |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
At the moment most of what I see is through a haze of new found rage and old pain. It will pass. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Kindness to some is natrual and some just missed the boat. they say, opposites attract. my dad said find your self! Very powerful DE... People hate those that make them feel their own inferiority Lord Chesterfields ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you Tori, I tried to convey the Hate I felt. I hope it came through. |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
I'm sorry for those who treated you so,their loss not yours.What they lost most was the love of a truly gentle man. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I'm humble enough already, no need to humble me further. |
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brockglaze Junior Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 21Muncie,Indiana,USA |
great, simply great, i cant say i know how you feel but this poem sure put an image in MY mind! nice work! ------------------ Brock J. Glaze |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
Good piece dream I like it.. I think it definitely conveys the hate... such a great poet! ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thanks, brockglaze. Gentle Soul, thank you, any compliment from you is thanks enough. |
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Sweet T Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 64mesa, arizona maricopa |
Not all women are out to hurt! I could really learn a lot from you. Your writing is so deep. It is amazing to see the different talents different people have. I really salute you. You are a master in your own field. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Again, thank you. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
In a world where there is a generalization of women being hurt by men, this truly shows that it is clear that men are all too often scarred by women. Although it was painful to write, thank you for posting this. We are truly not all bad, in that, may you see hope. |
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Phantom Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 18 |
Excellent poem! And they say only men abuse. ------------------ Open your heart to the Darkness,set your soul free. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You know it's too bad there are cruel people in the world. As for the other side, I too have endured the pain, from every relationship I was in. Seems we are drawn to the ones that hurt. The scars heal, we cannot dwell on what they have done and lose hope, for one day happiness will come and they will love you for who you are. As you see, the people here already respect you for who you are! |
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