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A Change of Seasons |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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She was Springtime and he was Summer She was a breeze - a breath of fresh air. He was a shining and brilliant figure, Springtime and Summer, a wonderful pair. The she was Summer and he was Fall. She was the sunshine up over the hill. He was the falling of leaves from the branches. He was the coolness of October's chill. Then she became Autumn, while Winter was he. She was the fading of yesterday's flowers. He was the blanket of snow on the rooftops. He was the counter of Life's final hours. Now, Winter is she. Hear her icy winds blow Across empty meadows in mournful, low tone. When she was still Springtime, why hadn't she known The chill of December would find her alone? [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-16-99).] |
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mia Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 118 |
Reading this gave me chills. How true it is that love changes like the seasons... It was really well thought up. Your poetry is simply grand and I don't eaven feel up to par to comment on it! You are a distinguished poet and you have an admirer in me. (is that how you say that in english?!? in french it is an admirateur) sorry! mia [This message has been edited by mia (edited 07-15-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Revered Elder, once again you show us the Way. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Balladeer, you comment on my life fully well, as this is the relationship I have been in for 19 years. Although I will be alone in my winter, I will have my memories of all of the seasons, and no one will be able to take that away from me. I know you didn't write this for me, but, my dear, you captured my heart. Thank you. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Cinderella Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 152Arizona |
The seasons go by so quickly I know But oh does your poetry magnificently flow!  [This message has been edited by Cinderella (edited 07-15-99).] |
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lenny Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 63front royal, va. u.s.a. |
Wonderful piece there Balladeer. The bittersweet story of all life and love on earth. Well crafted. Thank you. Smile... |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Ahhh, you're poems are always full of such a feeling.....I can not describe. You know, you are teaching me a few things with each verse I read. Thank you.  |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
The End, no matter how it comes, is only the end, by its beginnings As your words take us back to remember so. Brovo!! I'm thinking!! --------------------------------------------- If with pen in hand I make you think I've not wasted one drop of ink vlh. |
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Nina New Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 7memphis,tn usa |
Oh! how this takes me to a love now past. Forever in my memories i will bask. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
I am left speachless...Although I have one thing to say..."you are an increadable poet." blueloon |
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Mark R. Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 113San Francisco, CA. |
Balladeer you just continue to amaze me, never have I encountered such a talent as yours'. May you continue to thrive in poetry. Thanks for that beautiful poem. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again, my thanks to all of you for your encouraging words. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
 You know I will always admire any work you post here. Those that make me laugh and those that make me cry. As this one did. Yes, keep writing! Not for me. Not for anyone else here. But for you............ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
what can I say? Phenomenal, once again. I absolutely love the discription..its so vivid. Thank you for another excellent piece. ------------------ ..And down from the eternal heavens comes fate's jeweled fingertips, it's magic flowing into awaiting souls..--Krista Knutson *Krista Knutson* |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I am glad I read this -- it's a pleasure to read. A |
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Balladino Junior Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 18Prehistorical |
Wisdom!!! A poem of Wisdom!! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
How did I miss this one? Excellent. latearrival |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I tried to stoke the fires, to stay the hand of fall, I barred the door on winter--who needs it after all? I gleaned wild meadow's promise, to stay my path of sun but moonlight wove my destiny before the day was done.  Beautiful and emotive writing, Balladeer. |
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Poetal Member
since 2009-11-09
Posts 74Texas, United States |
I love the subject a change of seasons. I have written many poems on the subject and I love what the creator has done for us here on the third planet from the sun. As a bit of advise mind you, and it's only my view point, the meter was off. In the second stanza the first word should be Then not The and your rhyme scheme was good but you could have had every other line rhyme and it could have tightened the subject where it would be more understanding. Thanks for the read. AL Inmon |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is so true reminds me of just how different man and woman are but so alike. This is such an awesome poem. Love the similies. |
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markd New Member
since 2010-02-23
Posts 4 |
Deep man so deep and so elegant. |
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