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Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

0 posted 1999-07-14 04:07 PM

Ah! Darkness, My Lover,
My Friend.
I can feel you....comming.
Covering me,
Caressing me,
Taking me in.

Your Velvety Warmth
Your touch of Fire,
Wrapping me in comfort..
Eternal Hell's Fire.

I hear the screams,
Of pain and torture.
Oh,How I long to be with them...
To let your fires burn this Stone Heart to Ashes.

To fell the Talons
Of your Mighty Hands
Piercing the Flesh
Of my Body and Soul.
Succoring Me
Freeing Me
Forever
In Darkness.

Gentle Soul
Member

since 1999-07-12

Posts 273
Vinton,Ohio USA

1 posted 1999-07-14 07:53 PM

that is really deep.. touches my heart.. but I suppose its just cuz... darkness to me isnt a good thing.. but to each his own eh? ;-)

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Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

2 posted 1999-07-14 08:39 PM

Thank-You your words me much to me.THis is only my second attempt at trying ti express my feelings.

quote99
Junior Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 17
US

3 posted 1999-07-14 09:46 PM

Your rhyme fell off towards the end and the meter was inconsistant, but I see where you were going with this.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-07-14 09:50 PM

Rhyme and meter are not as important as expressing yourself well. You did great for only your second time.

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Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

5 posted 1999-07-14 10:35 PM

Thank -You both for the help and encouragement.I need all the help I can get!!

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

6 posted 1999-07-16 11:47 AM

they get ever better dragon you were potential is great

Dragon
Member

since 1999-07-14

Posts 138
Highmount,NY ,USA

7 posted 1999-07-16 08:18 PM

Thank-you Walt.Words do escaped me.

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

8 posted 1999-07-21 10:56 AM

................Loved it...................

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

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