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Promised Land (a love poem) |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
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Nimrod the Hunter Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 60 |
Are you trying to give me a heart attack? That's really good, Elizabeth! ------------------ Nimrod the Hunter |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thanks for your kind words, Nimrod, and no I'm not trying to give you a heart attack...or anyone else either. BTW what did you mean by that?  |
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Nimrod the Hunter Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 60 |
I said what I said because my cousin's aunt writes romantic novels, and by reading this, it sounds strangely similar. I have no idea why I commented at all, except that you asked what we thought. It is a bit cute. ------------------ Nimrod the Hunter [This message has been edited by Nimrod the Hunter (edited 06-16-99).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I think you have wonderful potential for erotic poetry ! Have you written any ? If you have, I'd love to see it! Most of mine is erotic - some people are offended by it, but honestly, it's nothing that we haven't all dabbled in, and it's so fantastic to FEEL where these poems take you!! Keep up the good work! ------------------ - poet FemmeFatale "The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you poetFemmeFatale! I wrote a poem called "You Belong to Me"-hidden somewhere in this forum, and it's kind of like this one. My poetry isn't quite as erotic as others, but I would like it to be! Thank you again! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Elizabeth I liked your poem. At first I thought it was going to be along the theme of "Third Rate Romance (Low Rent Rendezvous)," and then you turned the corner and made it even better. As for erotic poems: Since I'm "just a mere man," do you think you could write us a poem about Super Bowl parties or professional wrasslin'???? |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I'll see what I can do, LJA! Thanks for your comment! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I really enjoyed this one, thanks! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Simple, and so beautiful!! Great job!! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you all for being so kind...it really is encouraging! PoetFemmeFatale-still working on it!!!! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Elizabeth, I like your passion (and LOVE your rhyme) Nice poem! I'm looking for more... sandman |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Many thanks, Fred!  ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cheris'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Elizabeth, I could see it all happening! Sigh... |
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Crystal Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 62Hazel Park Mi U.S.A. |
Elizabeth... It is a very beautiful poem the way it is. It would be interesting to see more. |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
Beautiful poem. We all need our own promised land. |
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