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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Sadness dwells inside of me The pain I feel-you cannot see I once showed how sad I was You thought it would help to show your love But what you do not understand Is that my sadness cannot be cured by the touch of a hand So you got me help and you think it's over A counsler,some pills,and a gentle hug I hate to say it, but that isn't enough For some reason no matter what I do No matter how hard I try I can't get over it I always cry I no longer want to kill myself But to be happy and normal and love myself I love my family and my friends But for some ungodly reason I just don't feel complete I feel that I will never be truly happy So don't get me another counsler I'll keep taking the pills And when I said hugs just weren't enough I didn't mean don't give me one Because every once in a while when I start to cry Your arms around me - make me feel alright  [This message has been edited by Princess Lily (edited 07-13-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thrilling to be so chilling, isn't it? ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Not sure what was meant but thank you for reading my poem.I can promise that there will be more to come  ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
I would really like opinions on this poem--thank you!! ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe *A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive* [This message has been edited by Princess Lily (edited 07-30-99).] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Painfully sad..thank you for sharing your tale. You truly have talent with words. Remember I am here to listen, my friend. *hugs* ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Many thanx to my new and cherished friend Krista.Love~Lily ------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe *A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive* |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
i know exactly how you feel. i'm on prozac along with 2 other medications. i am being forced to see a phycologist and a phyciatrist (i doubt those are spelled right). no matter how hard i try, or what people try to do, nothing works. i feel the same way about "don't get me another counsler" and "I'll keep taking the pills." angel |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
lily, i would really like to talk to you. e-mail me if you feel the same way. ------------------ The world is in your hands; it is what you make of it. keep on chuggin' |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Lily What do I think? Well, the poem didn't flow as well as some of your others, and I did have a bit of a time picking up the rhythm because it got broken around the middle of the poem. And there was a depressing recurrent reversion back to the theme of medication and the counselling. All in all.... I think the poem was powerful, pure, and conveyed incredible emotions of depression and confusion. Don't change a SINGLE word. You captured every forlorn, hopeless, dark feeling all of us have felt at times in our lives when things seemed their most hopeless. This is a fine, fine piece of writing. You should be proud of it, and you should save it. There will be days when you think that you know how you felt now; and, when you reread this work of art, you will be reminded that there is no way a person can truly remember it all, and you will again realize from whence you came. This is a GREAT poem. You ought to be proud. |
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Princess Lily Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149USA |
Thank you for the reply angel girl.I will e-mail you very soon~Lily Long John--It is positively wonderful to recieve replies from you.Thank you for the honest opinion.And now that you have read it and told me what you think.I believe that I truly am proud ~Lily------------------ We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe *A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive* |
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