Open Poetry #1 |
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Methuselah's Face |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) ![]() |
My Methuselah's face Dripping formaldehyde And I can't leave this place Until your satisfied I'll never put much weight Into this phenomenon Just so you can create Sure that you want me gone Your desperate I live I only live to die And I cannot forgive Not getting a try Broken in stitches Among this sadness Burning the witches Prolongs the madness You feel the tissue It's futility’s scar Making you wish you Hadn't taken so far A lonely hearts dream You can't hope to replace One day you'll wake up With Methuselah's face [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-11-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Great one, Walt. Keep reaching for the Darkness. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
I love your style, walt! These dark ones always inspire me! ![]() ------------------ ~one voice~ For Myself, I live, Live intensely and am fed by life, and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James |
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brockglaze Junior Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 21Muncie,Indiana,USA |
Nice, very nice, it makes you think! ------------------ Brock J. Glaze |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
I like it! I wish I could develope a flow like that ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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quote99 Junior Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 17US |
Am I crazy or is this poem way off in the meter and rhyme? "Your desperate I live I only live to die And I cannot forgive Not getting a try" Can you explain what this means? I don't get it!!!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yes i have been guilty of bad meter here lately to this i apologize and will work diligently to correct thank you for the critique |
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