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Open Poetry #1

She Was Watching

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-07-09 02:34 AM

She Was Watching Me

Darkest demon from the depths of Hell
Came in the night to weave its spell
In the eyes of those who fear it
I heard tell of that evil spirit
But in it's eyes of charcoal black
I saw a secret that took me back
To a time when I was blind
Only knowing what my hands could find

That cloudy night I could not see
Then, I knew she was watching me
For from the window in the skies
I saw the anguish in her eyes
But all alone her eternal gaze
Wiped away the thickening haze
And I remembered, things of night
Can't cause mischief, immersed in light
When I knew there'd be nothing more
I showed the devil out the door

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-09-99).]

azblond
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since 1999-07-01

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The Steamy Desert

1 posted 1999-07-09 02:57 AM

Powerful, moving...I totally saw this happening!

tori
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since 1999-06-18

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Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

2 posted 1999-07-09 12:11 PM

You did it again!! :-) Four stars *****

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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3 posted 1999-07-09 09:16 PM

Very good poem Walt! I like this one a lot!

Aly
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4 posted 1999-07-09 09:20 PM

Very good! That wuz moving! I can't write like that! U've done it again!

Balladeer

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5 posted 1999-07-09 09:29 PM

I agree with the concensus, Walt. Powerful, as always.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

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Virginia

6 posted 1999-07-09 10:04 PM

Very effective, indeed, my friend. Love the lines, "And I remembered, things of night/Can't cause mischief, immersed in light".

Yuh, I think this is great.

-dp

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

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7 posted 1999-07-10 01:12 AM

thank yuh guys the response to this one was a surprise.. this is a companion piece i wrote to follow up a poem of mine called "High Above the Foam Swept Shore"

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