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Open Poetry #1

Death's Sorrow

foxy
New Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 3
Falmouth, MA, U.S.

0 posted 1999-07-08 11:09 AM

I feel myself trembling as I hear him grow near,
too overwhelmed by the tight grip of fear,
I hear him getting closer, but I can't seem to run,
I'm the last an final stop before his job is done.
I will not go easy into the dying light,
I won't let him take me into the blackened night.
But as death's solemn gaze fell sadly to my face,
My soul was gripped with sorrow upon his cold embrace.
For the only thing death wanted was what I'd tried to flee,
Poor death was doomed to roam the earth for all eternity.

Craig
Member

since 1999-06-10

Posts 444

1 posted 1999-07-08 12:05 PM

I liked this a lot, it reads really well and packs a lot in so few words. Can we have more please. How about telling us how the speaker escaped death to bring us this tale?

Ain' Miss Behavin'
Junior Member

since 1999-07-06

Posts 25

2 posted 1999-07-08 04:59 PM

This is really well done, Foxy - I hope to read lots more of your work

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

3 posted 1999-07-08 06:33 PM

I bow to you. Very nicely done. Your poem got me to thinking and hence, to writing... the highest compliment I can offer. Thanks for being a catalyst.

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-07-08 09:47 PM

Very nicely done,Foxy. The poem is well-constructed, concise and clear, with ending lines that make the reader think and ponder for a few moments longer after the poem has ended....always the sign of a worthy poem. Nice job!

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

5 posted 1999-07-09 01:25 AM

This piece fits my mood eloquently.

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Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-07-09 01:53 PM

Excellent! I never read a poem that made me feel sad for Mr. Death! This is well written. Welcome to the family! I look forward to reading more from you.

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