please let me know what you guys think! --- Darkness Falls

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Open Poetry #1

please let me know what you guys think! --- Darkness Falls

Delilah
Junior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 36
The Wonderful America

0 posted 1999-07-08 02:04 AM

Shadows lurk amongst the figures
Shadows prance along the walls.
Shadows cease the face with anger
How mysteriously they crawl.
On every night there is a shadow
Who stands hidden by them all.
Revealing himself only
When the golden sun calls.
It is a dream, I do not know
Oh how faint it all seems now.
I have to wait again till night
To fall, fall, fall.
In the daze I lay agian
Enveloped in my dream.
Awaiting the arrival
Of the well-known scene.
And so he comes drifting
Floating like a cloud.
Noiseless and dreary,
Neither softly nor too loud.
And there he hovers all night long
Passing the darkness away.
Till morning comes again
And he fades into the moon.
I open my eyes and notice
Not a soul is in my room.
This shadow, oh my shadow
Has gotten quite a part.
He's gotten a piece,
A portion, a place...inside my heart.

Ominous
Member

since 1999-07-04

Posts 68
Canada

1 posted 1999-07-08 02:51 AM

What a great poem. It flows nicely, and creats such an image in my mind. Beautifully done.

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

2 posted 1999-07-08 02:59 AM

Masterful blast of Darkness.

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

3 posted 1999-07-08 09:54 AM

I really like this poem! It grabs my attention, and flows nicely. It also stirred up a little suspense! More, more!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James

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