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** The Rose ** |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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I wish I would have been there but fear kept me at bay - My man from out of nowhere passed through the other day. He waited there in Memphis with a rose in hand for me - As I stood there in the shadows I became his memory... The rain fell fast to hide my tears so no one there would know - just how much this woman here - wants to love him so... They called for all to board, & I saw him turn to go - and something deep inside my soul was screaming out, " Please, No !" "Don't take him from me please, let him stay a while longer - let me hold him, through the night so my courage will grow stronger..." My man from out of nowhere disappeared into the night, Reality glared back at me - as the bus drove out of sight. I stepped out of the shadows finally everyone could see - the tears that fell as I reached down, to take the rose he left for me......... ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Femme - this was a wonderful, hopeful, crushing poem that really held me. You are so incredible with your words. |
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juanita Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 68Los Angeles, CA, USA |
I'm so glad you're back I miss your poems, great work as always! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thank you LngJhn...I'm glad you see the beauty, because all I see is regret....thank you again though, your words mean so much. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Richard 33 Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 187glen easton, wv usa |
Wow!! Now that is deep!! Very nicely done. Just remember poetry is a window to one's soul,and the inner most feelings, that is what makes you so good! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh you're good. Here I am trying to make you feel bad and now I'm the one gettin' all teary eyed. How do you do this to me so easily???? Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Poet.....tears of regret are those shed the hardest. Nicely written ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Are we gonna have to take up a collection for two more bus tickets so y'all can meet halfway?  If you two keep up with these incredibly beautiful poems I'll never stop crying! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My mind has turned to mush trying to follow this. Ok, lemmee get this straight. Michael went to Memphis. Poet Femme was there. Michael got down off the bus, Looked for her everywhere. PF was standing out of sight At the station, too. And, though it made her want to cry, She stayed way out of view. So Michael looked until the end, Bus doors began to close. His last act was to leave behind A beautiful red rose. When he had gone, PF came out Picked up the lovely rose And cried for all that could have been Though this was what see chose. So Michael wrote a lovely poem Describing his despair At traveling to Tennessee And finding no one there. Then PF wrote her own reply Of how she sat and cried At how she had not met him Because she chose to hide. So Mike feels sorry for Poet Femme For what she's going through Though he stood there with rose in hand While she played peek-a-boo. Have I got it right so far.........? |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Yeah Balladeer, that about covers it - but things got a bit brighter in Texas - check the adult. Michael |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
After reading this heartfelt work(with perfect meter I might add)-one thing was very apparent---his loss must have been the greater. PAL ------------------ |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
I am so lost!! is this what you guys talk about in icq??? I have been trying so hard to get this icq thing but I don't know what i'm doing wrong. I kept reading michaels poems and had no clue what he was talking about. I read PF poems and didn't care what she was talking about because i love her poems anyway. Now i sort of get it HE HE! this is soooo cute. Anyway people...if this is meant to be then it will happen again. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Glad you got home safely, Michael. (Are you home?) Looks like y'all had quite an adventure, eh what? Especially after you left memphis. Great seeing you again, btw! Enjoyed your humor, your company and your friendship. oh and pff, well written poem ... meter/rhyme/imagery, the works, nice job! Reminds me of something I wrote once upon a time.... i often think back about that man... well, that was a long time ago... funny how you look back and dream about what could have happened "if only"... life's like that. Moments of time that slip away so quickly... -dp |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You know, I think Caroline is right, you two go and find each other, say with everything you have what you feel and come back and do a duet about how you made it through the night...and I'll read totally enthralled as I am now... True love should never be kept apart, it's far too precious a gift.. I wish you both all the love and hugs, patience and endurance and may the world be yours to enjoy...together! ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
PFF, that was a beautiful poem! It describes so well the feelings inside. That you have for each other of course. Get the bus tickets you too, and Michael bring another rose, and PFF don't hide this time!!! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Scene from the auction of: 'The love of a lifetime' "Who will start the bidding?" Yes Michael?...Your love? any further offers on love Yes, the lady wearing the rose You're offering, "sorry Madam? what was that?, oh, you're offering to meet him halfway?" going, going, gone! (bangs the gavel) sorry, couldn't resist... HUGS both ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
pff, this was beautiful, wistful. breaks my heart to think of the two of you standing there, him waiting for you while your fear holds you back. ------------------ Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
What is this??? I'm getting all misty eyed, and I wasn'teven involved...you two better do something fast, or you're going to have a bunch of poets bawling all over the place! Bittersweet beauty in you words PFF... touching to say the least! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Ok I may be new but I am catching on, you have a real live paasions in poetry affair building here between Michael and pFF...wow! fairy tales on the net huh? I love it! And this whole scene reminds me of meeting my dad for the firsttime when I was 17..I was last off the plane cuz I was scared he would be somehow disappointed in me and when I finally got off I couldn't find him right away because he was hiding behind a giant ad sign thinking the same thing..that I would somehow be disappointed in HIM. How wrong we were....and we still had our time together..I hope the two of you find another time real soon to GET TOGETHER!!! Good luck to you both, and if it doesn't work out..look at all the great poems that came out of it! ;-) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 09-16-99).] |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Jeez. I almost cried after this. (something I very rarely do) Powerful, powerful, and strong too! You truly have much talent. Let's see if I can find anything else back here in the piles... ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Jeez. I almost cried after this. (something I very rarely do) Powerful, powerful, and strong too! You truly have much talent. Let's see if I can find anything else back here in the piles... ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Jeez. I almost cried after this. (something I very rarely do) Powerful, powerful, and strong too! You truly have much talent. Let's see if I can find anything else back here in the piles... ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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