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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Finality Words that should have been said, no longer needed. Tears once shed as if in mourning, now dry. Bands that symbolized eternity, lie at the bottom of a jewelry box... hidden from site. Pictures packed in a dusty box, are all that show that “we” once were. It would be so much easier, if I could bury my feelings like we bury our dead. ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
In so few words you really gave me a sense of loss and 'finality'. Such a devastating topic, but very well written, Hoot. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I like that last line there. If only we could bury those hurts like that. Great job!! |
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susieQ_luccier New Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 9central illinois |
I realy felt something when i read this. thank you hoot,Its wonderful written! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well written Hoot!  ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 09-15-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Severn, Susie, Whtdove and Denise......thank you all very much for your kind words ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
*whew* Very powerful. I definetly liked the closing line. Another clever spot was the "hidden from site". You truly have much talent and I'm grateful to be able to read your work. ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
few words with such an impact....Hoot, your talent shines so...I always search you out knowing ....... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Such sadness in your poetry, hoot...... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, You express your sadness to well. reading it has made me sad as well. *L* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer....yes, there usually is......someday there will be much better things to write about Pepper....thank you for those words of praise Bewulf....thanks, you are far too kind ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
whoa! I've been *there* before! But my band went flying out of the car window on rte 495, 75 mph...never looked back to try to find it...if you know what i mean.... hey and yeah i *did* bury my feelings like you bury the dead and you know what? you can, too. thanks for sharing this, rn |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Hoot, I'm sorry I didn't get to this one sooner. A deep sense of loss, with an undertone of determination to start over fresh. Very tough. Thanks. Tyson |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like the opener - "words that should have been said/no longer needed" Ya know, after awhile, there's just nothing left to say - and no reason to bother.... |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Yes it would. Although it has made for some great poetry, and this is no exception ,I hope one day you will be pain free. As always, you have my best wishes. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Doreen Nan and John, thank you all Andrew, you are a dear......thanks ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
hoot...this is describing what I, too, am going through. Thank you. I haven't been able to put it so eloquently as you have. Hugs to you. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Lovely, but to bury one's feelings would leave one bereft of all emotion, you wouldn't really want that. But I know what you mean!: ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is close to home for me |
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