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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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A snap I swear I heard a snap Staring up and away At the mirror slowly clouding over I heard the snap That sounded like a drowned Cherrio's last scream I felt it Echoing in my ears The world paused and took a breath I couldn't breathe Staring at the shifting landscape The snap So thirsty My eyes are dry But I can't remember how to close them I heard a snap And felt the whispers I swear I heard it I swear I did So thirsty I swear Alicat |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
not sure I understand the meaning of the "snap" but the poem is well done, it leaves the reader thirsting along with you...made me smile as well, last night my barrette came unfastedned all by itself with a snap and a thump to the back of my head, and so sudden it was that I actually turned to see who was behind me, thumping me in the head lol... |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Alastair - I never know what to expect from you - I never would've predicted snapping cheerios....  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Love the cheerio image! This is interesting, I'll admit but please explain the snap! |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Well, ok, guys...here it goes. As some know, I have a very active and vivid imagination. Snap was written after the vision of experiencing a stroke. I hope noone feels like crap for gaining amusement about this before realizing the original motiviation. If any does arise, please accept my apologies for not stating such earlier. Alicat |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
wow, that is even more deep, realizing what the snap is brings a whole new meaning, very, very well done! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
double 3 |
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