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johnt300
Member

since 1999-09-12

Posts 214
san diego, ca.

0 posted 1999-09-14 11:08 PM

After this long decade of pain and torment,
You finally reach me with comfort,
Even if only in my dreams.

You reach me with a sense of your own comfort,
Your own peace,
A strong hug on the patio,
As if I were visiting,
With everything right,
Once again.

I wish I could see you,
Talk to you,
Tell you how much I love you,
Not just in reply to your many "love you"'s,
But me saying it first,
And meaning it, the way I so strongly do now,
Now that you are gone.

Dad,
Is it really you visiting me in the night?
At first I was not sure,
For I met a man that first dream,
Who did not look me in the eye,
Did not seem to recognize me,
Though I knew he was you.

Slowly, with each dream, your old self,
Revealing,
As old as when we were a family,
As old as when you were happy,
Long before illness.

I broke down within my dream.
Felt my chest heave,
Over the loss of you.
Could not imagine waking up,
Never wanting to leave this painful dream,
Never wanting to leave you there.

Could not imagine letting go upon waking,
Despised the day ahead,
Longing for sleep again,
If only to see you
One last time.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 1999-09-14 11:10 PM

Sniffles....
You touched my heart, john - I felt your sadness through this lovely poem.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-09-14 11:25 PM

So deeply moving. I feel your pain. God bless you!

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Denise

johnt300
Member

since 1999-09-12

Posts 214
san diego, ca.

3 posted 1999-09-14 11:36 PM

Thank you both for you replies. I had been thinking about this one all day and wanted to get it out before I forgot too much of it. Thanks again.
Tyson

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 1999-09-15 12:46 PM

John, again you brought tears to my eyes. What a sad tell told, but do so wonderfully written. Your talent for writing free verse is very good.

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

johnt300
Member

since 1999-09-12

Posts 214
san diego, ca.

5 posted 1999-09-16 07:27 PM

Hoot,
Thank you very much, again. I've finally got some time to read other's work, so I'll get to it now.
Tyson

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 1999-09-16 08:06 PM

Your work is very intense, Tyson - You kept me wrapped up in this right to the end - and free verse often releases my feeble mind midway through the poem - not yours, though - Nice job.....

johnt300
Member

since 1999-09-12

Posts 214
san diego, ca.

7 posted 1999-09-18 12:10 PM

Thank you, Nan.
I am very glad you like this. Free verse is very much my favorite form. I am the same way reading free verse, by the way. Glad I'm not the only one. Thanks again. Bye.
Tyson

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