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She is Here
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
She is Here I once cherished her, soft auburn hair, Her remoteness around me, quietly, Circling about me, reaching in, Fond kiss to the soul, Without a touch, Without a trace. A still thread broken, A falling of Long shelved emotion, And explosions of bright spreading Soft light around us, Though she was blind to it. An unanswered passion so deep, A love lost to never capture, A lost girl in the firefight of life. Long ago, when we were young, We voiced our love for the other, I to her... Yet her to me, A crescendo of fragile lies, Foundations so deep, long ago ties That I could not see, Nor understand. A faded past of a fading bright star, My once true love, Wandering in and out, Of this loud bellowing soul. A soul mate, Once and always, Forever lost, In a billowing sky of sharks, To never reach land, again. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
John, This is a very heartfelt and moving piece. I enjoy the style you use, free verse works very well for this piece. It flows with a life of its own capturing the reader in its wake. I especially liked these lines: "Yet her to me, A crescendo of fragile lies, Foundations so deep, long ago ties That I could not see, Nor understand." Wonderfully done!! Welcome to the group. I willl be looking forward to more from you!!! ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Absolutely lovely! Sad and haunting. You have a gift of imagery that is wonderful read! Welcome to the family!  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Oh my...this is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading this. Hope to see more of your work soon. ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, indeed! Very lovely! I enjoyed this immensely!  ------------------ Denise |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Thanks for the replies. I didn't get this much response when I posted it months ago at yahoo clubs. It is very rewarding to hear good things from good poets. Thanks again. Tyson |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
so beautiful John and superbly written.....loved this piece...thank you for sharing... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Pepper, Thank you very much. I really appreciate that. This is my favorite, I think. Thanks again. Tyson |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very touching poem...brought tears to my eyes!! Welcome!!! Justbleu ------------------ "Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???" |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Justbleu, Thank you. I hate to bring tears to your eyes, but am glad it affected you to that extent. Bye now. Tyson |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 beautifully sad |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Thank you. I just logged back on here after many years of being away. Nice to see someone post a comment so long after. |
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