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DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-09-11 11:19 PM

Doubt began to eat away at his mind.
Nightly jealousy preyed upon his fear.
Evidence he could never hope to find.
The ashes of love could not shed a tear.

Shameful fractures scatter his willful pride.
It drove him to view her indiscretions.
His smile his cuckolded thoughts have belied.
Her lies have fed his darkest obsessions.

Deliberately he seduced her best friend.
That retaliation wounded his soul.
His well of bitterness only deepened.
Jagged shards of broken hearts can't heal whole.

Burning tears fell as he signed the decree.
Toasting life he raised a glass of chablis.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvil©

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 1999-09-11 11:23 PM

I dunno Dream. You blow me away, how you can throw a romantic one out, then a dark one. Hmmn! Your talents are great!

caroline
Senior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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2 posted 1999-09-11 11:23 PM

Dream you really ARE in a romantic mood tonight...and both sides of it, I'd say. Another well written one. I'm gettin' my fix tonight

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Lucie
Senior Member

since 1999-06-20

Posts 1077
Houston

3 posted 1999-09-11 11:24 PM

There is a lot of pain here.

But as you say, pain is life, life is short, you will endure.

I have faith that this is true.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 1999-09-11 11:41 PM

A sad commentary on life and love, I'm afraid. This is a good one, DE.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-09-11 11:44 PM

Very well written Dream, your talents never cease to amaze me

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

6 posted 1999-09-12 03:20 AM

I like this one! Is it me, or is there a touch of sarcasm here?

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~onevoice~

"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 1999-09-12 08:23 AM

Dream,I love this one but then again I love all your works.

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

8 posted 1999-09-12 10:12 AM

I love how you ended it with the last 2 lines....wrapped it up quite well and with such an exclamation point! Fabulous read, sir! Like the ending of a geat book......

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

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