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desperado
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since 1999-05-24
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FT Hood,Tx

0 posted 1999-09-10 09:25 PM


here in the heaven I created within myself
away from the physical necessities of life and love
I find the emptyness that I have made
and the love I often dreamed of
yet in this palace of tears and words
your shrine has not been blessed
so alone I sit before your memory
tired and forelornly depressed
in my nose, the scent of you
lingers as if you were here
and my mind sees you everywhere
while I live within my fear
I had you once before me
and yet I threw it all away
like a dried roses petals
I never saw more than today
yet now that you are gone
I know the hole you filled
now just a remainder of my former self
for your leaving truely killed
you never said a word in anger
silent were the tears you cried
my eyes were closed from you that day
that day in which you died
so now as I sit before your throne
dreaming of the you that went away
may you still love me for what I did
and protect me from the light of day

© Copyright 1999 James Webster - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-09-10 10:23 PM


Quite sad and full of desperation for someone lost. Very well done.

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Denise

caroline
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2 posted 1999-09-11 09:35 AM


very beautiful, and so touching...

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-09-11 11:02 AM


So sad and beautifully written.

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Helewes

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-09-11 05:48 PM


Haunting

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 1999-09-11 09:25 PM


Excellent! I like the meloncholy feel to this one...fits my mood today.
desperado
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since 1999-05-24
Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx
6 posted 1999-09-11 11:20 PM


thanks guys. you are sure all missing out on all the fun here in dc. I'll see you around here on the forums. if not, don't get upset. hehe =-)
moonmoon
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 277
TX , USA
7 posted 1999-09-12 12:03 PM



Yes, a sadly gripping poem...Well done..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr



doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
8 posted 1999-09-12 12:18 PM


If staying up 'til 4:30AM and plotting against people you are supposed to like makes you this creative, than I say, "Go for it, you NUT!" hehehe.... When did you write this? This is fabulous! Really. Quit standing on that chair and flailing your arms around and write another one!

dp

desperado
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since 1999-05-24
Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx
9 posted 1999-09-12 12:42 PM


well... ummm I wrote it just when I posted it. only took me about ten minutes while you were busy making dinner and me and mike were taking turns on the computer. but if you want to know the exact time I posted it, then it is listed right next to name I put in... *evil grin*
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
10 posted 1999-09-12 10:55 AM


Okay guys....I'm soooo jealous, I want to be there too...pouts, now why didn't I go

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin

desperado
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since 1999-05-24
Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx
11 posted 1999-09-13 01:04 AM


sorry hun. if it makes you feel better, it's because I'm afriad of large groups of psychos that kidnap me and take me around the capitol area and make me do stupid stuff like talk and dance and put myself into one of those "I'm the man" type of poses. but then again, what if I really am?


(*note to self...stop using that green fungus that grows on rye bread for "alternative uses"...)

=-P~~~~

Justin Thyme
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since 1999-09-13
Posts 216
Oz
12 posted 1999-09-13 12:05 PM


ZEE PLANE - ZEE PLANE



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