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remembering you |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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here in the heaven I created within myself away from the physical necessities of life and love I find the emptyness that I have made and the love I often dreamed of yet in this palace of tears and words your shrine has not been blessed so alone I sit before your memory tired and forelornly depressed in my nose, the scent of you lingers as if you were here and my mind sees you everywhere while I live within my fear I had you once before me and yet I threw it all away like a dried roses petals I never saw more than today yet now that you are gone I know the hole you filled now just a remainder of my former self for your leaving truely killed you never said a word in anger silent were the tears you cried my eyes were closed from you that day that day in which you died so now as I sit before your throne dreaming of the you that went away may you still love me for what I did and protect me from the light of day |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Quite sad and full of desperation for someone lost. Very well done. ------------------ Denise |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
very beautiful, and so touching... ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
So sad and beautifully written. ------------------ Helewes |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Haunting ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent! I like the meloncholy feel to this one...fits my mood today. |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
thanks guys. you are sure all missing out on all the fun here in dc. I'll see you around here on the forums. if not, don't get upset. hehe =-) |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Yes, a sadly gripping poem...Well done..  ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
If staying up 'til 4:30AM and plotting against people you are supposed to like makes you this creative, than I say, "Go for it, you NUT!" hehehe.... When did you write this? This is fabulous! Really. Quit standing on that chair and flailing your arms around and write another one! dp |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
well... ummm I wrote it just when I posted it. only took me about ten minutes while you were busy making dinner and me and mike were taking turns on the computer. but if you want to know the exact time I posted it, then it is listed right next to name I put in... *evil grin* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Okay guys....I'm soooo jealous, I want to be there too...pouts, now why didn't I go  ------------------ "The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
sorry hun. if it makes you feel better, it's because I'm afriad of large groups of psychos that kidnap me and take me around the capitol area and make me do stupid stuff like talk and dance and put myself into one of those "I'm the man" type of poses. but then again, what if I really am? (*note to self...stop using that green fungus that grows on rye bread for "alternative uses"...) =-P~~~~ |
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Justin Thyme Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 216Oz |
ZEE PLANE - ZEE PLANE |
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