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OPINION PLEASE, AT LEAST THE SPELLING IS OKAY..(I think)
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OPINION PLEASE, AT LEAST THE SPELLING IS OKAY..(I think) |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA 
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No Reprieve Upon foreign sod she trods, her heart is heavy laden. Betrothed by time, claimed by none, this gentle and fair maiden. She treads alone, on new soil unfamiliar with worldly ways. Bitter lessons stalk her heels, And within her being, stays. Her past is left in shadows, Her future yet untold. Faltering footsteps placed upon A land barren and cold. Unrelinquished love has she. It lies as a smoldering fire. Save but one, there is no other, that can quench her souls desire. She rejoices not, from her life, her love is not returned. Each new day brings heartache, and again her love is spurned. Darkness lies within her soul, in despair she bows her head. And dainty footsteps are all that's found, upon the cliffs raw edge. |
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traveler Member
since 1999-08-17
Posts 119 |
Stunning, I'm at a loss for words ...a very touching piece ... welcome to the forums ... looking forward to your next post ... |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
This might sound like a callous question but ... did she jump? (wanting to make sure I understand). This was good ... I enjoyed the read, looking forward to more ... Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
Traveler..Thank you sincerely for your welcome and I am VERY proud of your comment. I read constantly here and post occasionaly..Don't consider myself a 'poet' but I do get brave and post every now and then. Nocht..You asked "did she jump'? I really don't know..At the time I wrote this, 'she jumped' but now I think maybe she just climbed down..;-) Thanks to you and to all that takes the time to read my 'stuff'. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Well written Kitty..I think, at some point in our lives, we all feel as if we are standing so alone with our 'unrelinquished love'..I hope it was a passing phase for you..  ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Kitty I LOVE it!! : I find it hard to write about fantasy, for me it's easier writing the things I know. Share the secret please? : ------------------ Words that enlighten the soul are more precious than jewels. ~Isis~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well, maybe you should consider posting more often! This was very well done! I think you did a fantastic job! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely written Kitty...I enjoyed the read and welcome!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Kitty: Such a visual in that last stanza. At first I thought she jumped, but then something else took hold. Your line in the third stanza "Her future yet untold" makes me think she just walked away. Perhaps only her spurned love was cast over the edge and now she travels new lands in search of a better one. Thanks for sharing what I felt to be a very emotional piece. Keep em' coming. |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
I too hope she did not jump. Nicely written. |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
To all of you who has or will respond to this 'poem'?.. Isis, WhtDove, moonmoon, hoot_owl_rn Andrew Scott, etc. None of you can possibly know how good it makes me feel to think someone has enjoyed something I wrote. You all have given me the encouragement to keep trying. Thank you all so much!!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done Kitty. I thought this was excellent. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
May I add my welcome to you, and my compliments on a well crafted poem. It was mesmerizing! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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