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To Have Never Loved (My first attempt at a sonnet...at least I think it's a sonnet) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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To Have Never Loved ‘Tis better to have loved and lost they say Than never to have known true love at all But I, who’ve watched love quickly slip away Would rather not have taken that cruel fall Over many a lost love have tears I cried But those be mild and oh so few Compared to when, my love, you died Taking my heart to the grave with you So now, I live buried inside my pain Memories of you forever on my mind True love will never I feel again My heart is gone, this shell is left behind ~And to the grave my voice will surely call ~‘Tis far better to have never loved at all [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 09-08-99).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow,hoot, this is oh so very sad, yet so beautiful. I love it ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dark Angel...thank you very much Can anyone answer my question...Is this a sonnet??? ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Hoot I love this.. I don't know anything about sonnets, but this is definately an awesome piece of work!!! Wonderful job! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
hauntingly beautiful..very touching indeed... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
very nice, don't know about sonnets either, but it is beautiful writing!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Hoot, I am sorry to join the list in saying I don't know either. But I did like it! You wrote it beautifully... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful, Hoot! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you all for your nice comments....I really appreciate them Still...anyone....is this or is it not a sonnet??? Please!!! ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey, Hoot - Here I am..... just busy gettin off to Washington DC - I expect to see you there.... This is a great poem - nice message..... Your rhyme scheme is intact for a Shakespearean Sonnet - a-b-a-b/c-d-c-d/e-f-e-f/gg You start out with your iambic pentameter intact and lose it a bit about halfway through - Just a nip here and a tuck there, and will be perfect...... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, I agree with Nan, but what you did was wonderful. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Nan...need to increase my poetic knowledge a bit here. I appreciate the help Seymore, thank you vey much ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
All I can say is ... amen. Been there, done that. A very good piece of work. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
I am so glad Nan gave you a critique's approval.Naniess,if thou say its a sonnet,then a sonnet it shalt be... I was just gonna say, sonnet or not, it was a beautiful piece anyway..(excuse my poetic illetracy..hehe) |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Oops double post..Sorry..My 'puter's gone nuts..!!!!! [This message has been edited by moonmoon (edited 09-09-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nochtdraco...Thank you, wish you wouldn't have had to been there done that though Moonmoon...thank you kindly ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, indeed Hoot! Very emotional and heart wrenching! ------------------ Denise |
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