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Erin's Song (a lullabye challenge from one voice)
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Erin's Song (a lullabye challenge from one voice) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
you drift away on moonbeams. Sparkles in your hair from stardust bring, a gift from God in an angel's dreams. I'll stay by your side through the night, keeping all bad dreams away. Listen to me as you float along, believe in the things I say. I love you my darling can't you see, the sandman has come to call? It's time to sleep and dream of love, for love will conquer all. God's angels hold you on their wings, rocking you gently to sleep. Watching as you drift away, my love is yours to keep. ©1999 DreamEvil ------------------ Life is pain is poetry, at least I'll be productive. DreamEvil© |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Thank you so much, Dream. This means a lot to me. Thank you. It's beautiful. ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This is so perfect there aren't enough superlatives for it.  Beautiful work here Dream! ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... [This message has been edited by caroline (edited 09-02-99).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Dream, this is absolutley beautiful and so beautifully written |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Excellent! Seems you mastered the challenge graciously. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DreamEvil, No less then I expected from you. Wonderful poem. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Dream....a very comforting lullaby. Ah...to sleep that peaceful sleep knowing you are held by someone who loves you, what a wonderful thought. ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very pretty....well done.... Now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the Lord my soul to keep, If I should die before I wake, Thank You God |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Dream This is a beautiful lullabye. What a diverse talent you are. Some of your darker pieces chill me to the core and then you write things like this. It's beautiful. ------------------ Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
What a delightful, whimsical piece. I love it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You truly never cease to amaze me at what you can write! This was incredible! I am left in total AWE! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice - Perhaps you've found a new vocation, DE... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Completely Stunning! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I echo all that has been said before. Well done! and thanks for sharing. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautifully written, DE. Your love of children shows in this lullabye! What challenges are left for you to conquer?  |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I liked it despite myself. Good job. ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
This is beautiful Dream. ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thanks be to everyone but the credit for this piece goes entirely to one voice for not only allowing me to write this for her but for her love of children and self that inspired me to do so. Please give her the honor she deserves. ------------------ Life is pain is poetry, at least I'll be productive. DreamEvil© |
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Ominous Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 68Canada |
Beautiful Dream, It brought me close to tears. ------------------ I am but a shadow, lost within this world of darkness |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
No, no, no.... you wrote it... I had nothing to do with it! I only told you that I liked the title! LOL Don't be modest... This is definitely yet another masterpiece! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Critic New Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 9 |
you're in the right place, but it got there by violence. You should try more complex rhymes if you want to be "there". This is not your potential. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
This was purely beautiful, touching, and wonderfully written DE...and what a challenge too One Voice! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You really made me smile... ...one of those deep smiles...HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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