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The Little King
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The Little King |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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This was inspired by Hoot... thanks! Once there lived a little boy, a shy and quiet child often he was overlooked his sibling kind of wild. He traveled through each day in life in quiet fantasy. Of knights in armor, far off lands and kingdoms make believe. He built a castle in his mind with motes around its wall a drawbridge he alone controlled which no one crossed at all. He was an evil wicked king his reign was far and wide. Strong character he presented all to hide the fear inside. In mind he wove elaborate tales of dragons he would slay. The other kingdoms he would seize and belong to him someday. But he was caught quite unawares when down the road did stroll a bent and wicked little woman, such an awfully ugly troll. She hollered up to him across the mote filled with shark fin. My name is Elizabeth, I’m your sister… let me in! The little king he rolled his eyes with exasperated moan he yelled over his shoulder.. Mom! She won’t leave me alone. Oh I forgot to tell you all about the mother queen. She was the only person he allowed inside his dream. She was a kind and gentle soul and seem to understand. That Christopher needed privacy in his far off kingdom land. So she hollered from the kitchen of this castle in his mind that if Beth didn’t step away she’d have a sore behind. Go away and leave him be, he doesn’t bother you. I’ll make you scrub the dungeon, go find something else to do. The little king puffed up his chest allegiance did he vow and claimed that if it took all day he’d repay the queen somehow. So off in search of tribute to his mother queen he went and brought back to her a flower, a small dandelion, bent. But in his eyes she saw the dozen roses that he gave bent and kissed the little king, promising to always save. You see the little king's big heart wasn’t really all that mean, but big sisters they just can’t view, what’s seen by mother queen. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lucie, Let me be the first to stand up and bravo the poem. In this you hit a new high. My oh My. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you soooo much.. and I must say he loved it.. you should have seen his little face... 'cept now he keeps calling his sister a troll..haha.. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Absolutely adorable! I loved every word  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I enjoyed this very much! And as the recipient of many a bent dandelion, I agree, mothers have a different perspective!  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Finely woven, Lucie. You do yourself proud. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
ahhh;I'm still smiling...wonderful ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Proud to be the mother of this little king! Thanks all! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lucie this is most remarkable! This is one I'll definitely save with my favorites! ------------------ Denise |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thanks dsnyder.... glad you all liked it. |
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Pufalove Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 119Houston, Tx. USA |
Lucie....been reading yours and others for a bit now...course you know, cause you turned me on to this fine location. A poet I am not, but I can appreciate all the fine works and read the many emotions of all who post here. I had to finally comment on one. This is truly a heartfelt poem and makes me cry each time I read it...He is truly a little king and you are definately a queen....I know, because.. because he pierced my heart with that sword......GREAT......REALLY GREAT! ------------------ |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is wonderfully fun to read. What a sweet story. A |
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