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sarah
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since 1999-09-05
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sydney, australia

0 posted 1999-09-05 05:36 AM


to be sightless for an hour
a quiet room, away from our
virtual lives
to feel that he
were standing very near to me
a thin wall of night air between
our bodies; ah to touch his face
to slowly, delicately trace
the contours of his skin, to find
those places that when touched unwind
all thought
i sought him in a dream
one night and found a man, but he
seemed not who i had thought to see
and yet his palpably elusive form
enters my thoughts at early dawn
and stays there, mocking through the day
my vain attempts to shy away
from dreaming i'm in his embrace
sightless, in that quiet place.

enraptured by his scent, his tone
i shiver as he says, "alone
at last," and soothes me with a kiss.

this fever in my head remains
unquenched as soft, familiar strains
of gershwin reach inside my room,
and i eke out this wretched poem
with shuffling cadence, awkward rhyme,
to speak of love and kissing blind.

© Copyright 1999 sarah - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
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California
1 posted 1999-09-05 06:05 AM


A beautiful and enchanting poem, Sarah.
I truly enjoyed this piece.

Michael

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

2 posted 1999-09-05 06:47 AM


A very beautiful poem, I too enjoyed it. Thanks Sarah
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-09-05 08:31 AM


Very nicely written...I enjoyed the read

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

caroline
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since 1999-08-16
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4 posted 1999-09-05 10:25 AM


Very lovely...very dreamlike and wistful. I like this a lot.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 1999-09-05 10:38 AM


"speak of love and kissing blind"

Exactly what 'internet romance' consists of.. your poem is haunted with longing, love and regret. Nicely done!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 1999-09-05 10:56 AM


Sarah,
I to was enchanted.
Wonderful poem.

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