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Grampa no no ( A Villanelle)
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Grampa no no ( A Villanelle) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Grandpa no no ( A villanelle ) Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo, My grandchildren, remember me, this bray. Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no. I'm not simpatico to their gusto And so their attitudes always gave way, Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo. These three amigos, do a fandango, In my home, an incredible display, Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no. Aglow my house, to them a Disney show And my say of no, a challenge to obey, Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo. The imbroglio is, I love them so, My voice hangs mistletoe, with them touche. Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no. Soon they will grow and these days will go, Will they remember my no resume? Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo, Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Great poem with a great message! (Am I surprised? - NOT!!!!) ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, Why the surprise? Thank you for the read and comment. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Wow Sy!!!! What a great piece! I'm going to have to look into this style...I like it! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sally, Thank you it was fun to write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, ditto "grandma" no-no! Very cute! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You don't write like a grandma. Thanks *L* |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Seymour, I liked this poem, but I dont see any difference between it and mine except for a bit of repetitiveness of the first line....is there a certain pattern to it? ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A lighter version of a Villanelle..most I've seen are dark. Good job!! Challenge well met!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Systematic Decay, The Villenalle consists of five tercets and a quatrain in which the first and third lines of the opening tercets recur alternately at the end of the other tercets and together as the last two lines of the quatrain. I hope this helps you. If not study one of the other villenalles and see how they repeated the lines. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Seymour....a delightful read. My second look at a villanelle but I see the pattern to follow. The humor in it was a nice touch. Very nice job. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Bravo Sey, well done! I liked the humor as well! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DeVine one, Your flowers of praise humble me. To Marilyn, My humble thanks. And Christopher, Your comment are always welcome. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
as another "grandma" no-no enjoyed this much, Sy ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Impressive, Seymour. I like this one a lot. ------------------ Michael Anderson May Darkness find you all through the day. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pepper, Never would have thought you were a grandmother. Thank you so much. Michael, Praise from you is praise indeed. Since I think so highly of your work. |
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