My Drug of Choice (villanelle)

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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0 posted 1999-09-27 10:36 PM

Like a designer drug you rush my veins.
With an addict's madness my blood does burn.
To my love and despair you hold the reins.

Simple faith my longing for you sustains.
Romantic overtures you sometimes spurn.
Like a designer drug you rush my veins.

My tears for you flow like warming spring rains.
In spite of myself your love I did earn.
To my love and despair you hold the reins.

Hot-blooded rages your soothing touch drains.
My innate distrust I strive to unlearn.
Like a designer drug you rush my veins.

Learning to love broke emotional chains.
To call you my own I will always yearn.
To my love and despair you hold the reins.

When life falls into dust only love remains.
Your love for me became hard to discern.
Like a designer drug you rush my veins.
To my love and despair you hold the reins.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07

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1 posted 1999-09-27 11:00 PM

I liked this a lot....well done!

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Julie Jordan Scott
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since 1999-09-19

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2 posted 1999-09-27 11:03 PM

This melodic peace is breathtaking. Reminiscint of a love past. Of a dream longing to be heard. Of a heart yearning to be completed. Excellent work....

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Lucie
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since 1999-06-20

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Houston

3 posted 1999-09-27 11:06 PM

I love this style.. and the content was intense.. good poem friend!

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

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Southern Florida

4 posted 1999-09-27 11:18 PM

very passionate...I like in particular
the first stanza, and I can feel your need and longing for her ....great work....enjoyed this alot

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Balladeer

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5 posted 1999-09-27 11:23 PM

Excellent execution and a well-chosen topic.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

6 posted 1999-09-27 11:32 PM

dreamEvil,
A difficult subject in a difficult form you did well for a Villanelle. Enjoyed the read.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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7 posted 1999-09-27 11:59 PM

Excellent! Well done, DE

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Denise

Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

8 posted 1999-09-28 12:49 PM

You know, I saw the title and just KNEW what this was going to be about! LOL
Well done dream!

Beki
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since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

9 posted 1999-09-28 02:05 AM

eXCELLENT MY FRIEND!Villanelles are so difficult but this one was masterfully done. HAve you visited my website and read mine? Http://www.room1401.com/beki

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society

Isis
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since 1999-09-06

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Sunny Queensland

10 posted 1999-09-28 02:23 AM

(SIGH) well done again friend..

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~Isis~
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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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11 posted 1999-09-28 02:35 AM

This is Excellent Soul-brother

Well Done

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Temptress

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since 1999-06-15

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12 posted 1999-09-28 04:56 AM

Well, I don't have the slightest what a Villanelle is, but I must say this is a very touching poem. I knew you had it in yourself to write like this. I'd like to see it more often. It is refreshing to see a love poem so different in this day and age of cliches..(which i dearly love mind you)
*winks*

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

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California

13 posted 1999-09-28 04:59 AM

Yeah Dream, life can be intense when your drug of choice is an emotion, but hey, it makes for one heck of a ride. Fasten your belts, i'm in on this one with ya!

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Michael Anderson

Loneliness isn't in being alone;
Loneliness is alone in being.

Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02

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NM

14 posted 1999-09-28 11:24 AM

yes, very well done, and yes, know exactly what you mean...

Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

15 posted 1999-09-28 12:52 PM

Wonderful poem, Dream. I enjoy good love poems a lot, but it is so rare that I see one. And this was amazing, especially in this form. There are too few love poems without the birds chirping, pink roses, my heart beats only for you BS. (Not to say those are all bad things, but when a poem becomes a bland collection of mushy images.....you get the point)

Anyway sorry for rambling. Excellent piece.

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DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22

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16 posted 1999-09-29 02:02 AM

Again, thanks to all for replying to this one.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

passing shadows
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17 posted 2004-05-30 04:04 AM

well done!

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