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Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 1999-09-26 10:47 PM

A heart has wings and so it can fly,
across the miles of land worn and dry.
to touch a heart, a soul so dear,
With a wish for him to be near.
A friend to lean on and to give me strength,
One who I know will go to great length.
To dry my tears and right all the wrongs.
Done to my bleeding soul and so it belongs,
to the soulmate I know but have never seen.
The friend I have longed for but what does it mean?
To love so intensly but from afar.
Just know I am with you where ever you are.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-09-26 11:02 PM

This is beautiful! Very well done! For the title, I'm not sure, how about 'The Heart's Journey', or 'Wherever You Are'? Lovely, lovely poem.

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Denise

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 1999-09-26 11:06 PM

D...thankyou for you imput. I do appreciate it. I will consider your suggestions. They are both very suitable to this poem.

Julie
Senior Member

since 1999-08-20

Posts 739
Houston, TX

3 posted 1999-09-27 12:43 PM

This was great...I would go with "Whereever You Are??

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert

Paul Allen Lupien
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 114
Ferndale,Mi.USA

4 posted 1999-09-27 02:17 AM

Title suggestion:"To You,My Heart"

a very sincerely written poem...

PAL

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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-09-27 08:31 AM

Beautiful

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 1999-09-27 04:27 PM

Julie...Thankyou for you thoughts. I appreciate them.

PAL....thankyou for you comments and your title suggestion. I like it very much.

Hoot......Just thankyou for reading my work.

[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 09-27-1999).]

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 1999-09-27 10:20 PM

just doing the bumping up thing.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

8 posted 1999-09-28 05:24 AM

Marilyn, I thought this a wonderful piece.
I think "A Heart Has Wings" would be a most fitting title.

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Michael Anderson

Loneliness isn't in being alone;
Loneliness is alone in being.

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

9 posted 1999-09-28 09:25 PM

Micheal.....I am thrilled that you like this piece. Again I have to thankyou for taking the time to look at my work and tell me what I can do to improve myself. I will take the title suggestion into consideration.

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