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My Fair Seaside |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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The jutting cliffs above the sea The velvet sands along the shore Are calling me...they beckon me To come again, to come once more. The graceful gulls that soar above The salty spray, the lapping tide It's all that I've been dreaming of ...To see again my fair seaside. The gentle rhythm of your waves Your vast expanse...it humbles me Your majesty...my heart enslaves Yes...I'll come once more to the sea. The velvet sands along the shore The jutting cliffs above the sea Are calling me to come once more They're calling still; they beckon me. 10/98 OK, Paul, done! ------------------ Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 09-27-1999).] |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
oooh, this is so beautiful. Truly makes me wish to see the ocean..wonderful work. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, Alwye, for reading and commenting. This is my most favorite spot in the whole wide world! I'd live there if I could! Ahhh...wouldn't it be lovely to walk along the shore every morning? Well, I can dream!  ------------------ Denise |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I do live there, well about a mile up the hill from the water, but I think you have captured it beautifully. Given a real opportunity I would not live anywhere else in the world! Tried it once or twice, shriveled up from lack of salt air! LOL Thanks for sharing your beautiful poem. ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This inspires me to find a small piece of shore to call my own. I understand the wonder of the sea and the call it has. Wonderfully done. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Oh God Denise, we have kindred hearts when it comes to the maiden of the sea. I love her as much as you do. You description of her was like a song. Thanks so much for the reminder of the place I love most in the world!!!!!....:.. ------------------ A hero is a man who does what he can. ~Isis~ (The Fragile Rose) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nicely done Denise |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, Beki, Marilyn, Isis and Hoot for reading and commenting. It is always appreciated! I'm glad that you enjoyed it! ------------------ Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
lovely Denise ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Denise
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Thank you, Pepper, so glad you enjoyed it! ------------------ Denise |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
I like this poem too but have one teeny,tiny suggestion:that would be the ommision of the last "still" in the last line.To me,otherwise, the flow is so perfect. PAL ------------------ |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Yea, I like that better too, Thanks Paul. ------------------ Denise |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful, Denise. You've written several along this line and I can say that one of the true wonders of the sea is you yourself. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you, Balladeer for reading and your kind comment. I guess my passion for the sea comes through! ------------------ Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ Indeed ... your passion flows with the tides~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Loved this....can I come out to see your seaside? It sounds bautiful. God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, me too |
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