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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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Daddy's Girl A grown up man and a little girl Make such a shameful pair. He repeatedly abuses her, She doesn’t seem to care. This is the life she’s forced to live, She knows she has no choice. His big hands no longer needed To muffle her screaming voice. It wasn’t all that long ago When the light in her eyes died. The day Daddy climbed in her bed And forced himself inside. His eyes were lit by the fire That fueled his burning need. She tightly clenched her eyes shut As he showered her with seed. He reached the peaks of ecstasy Surrounded by a world of sin. Silent tears flowed abundantly As her essence died within. To be abused by the man she loves Such a cruel twist of fate Hardly a lesson to be learned At the tender age of eight. [This message has been edited by Tara Simms (edited 09-26-1999).] [This message has been edited by Tara Simms (edited 09-26-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Gosh Tara.....I am setting here crying. No one has a right to do this to anyone, especially not a child. Your words are so vivd, you make this come alive and grab the reader by the heart in the grasp of this very dramatic poem. The subject matter horrid, but you have done an excellent job of portraying the effects of sexual abuse through your words. The abuser has taken much more than the childs body, he's taken her dignity, her childhood and her life....I can think of things I'd like to do to people like this!!! ------------------ Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same. Thank you all for leaving footprints!! |
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searchingsoul New Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 4Paddock Lake, Wi.USA |
that was beautifully written, your words came to life, and touched me, You made all the emotions real, |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
ooooh.. you are soooo good at this... keep up the good work  ------------------ "If to rectify your demeanor, You must imitate another, Your philosiphy on morality Is a burden on your mentality, Your actions based on popularity, Will never fulfill you internally, Cuz the world was not blessed with equality, But rather with fake geniality. --823-- |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you ladies. Hoot, I'd especially like to thank you for the help in making it flow better. Mucho Gracias! ------------------ Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching. Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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startin_fresh Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 137US |
Very moving Tara. I have got to say it definitely brings many mixed emotions to the surface. Thank you for posting your work. |
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graham Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 60South Yorkshire, England |
Tara..those words really cut through. It's an incredible piece of writing that make me want to hit that man. I wish HE could read this! |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Dear Tara, you never cease to amaze me....The sadness & brutality portrayed here is still lingering..You have an awesome way of sketching emotions..!!! Thanks for the read.. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I sat here for over 5 minutes after reading this piece and wondered how to reply....your writing is beyond excellent and I am still feeling the many emotions that this brought out in me........I think that says it all..... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you pepper, graham, moonmoon, startin_fresh: Your comments mean a lot to me. It breaks my heart to think that there are children living this life every day. If only we could stop it. ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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Mark4Him@juno.com Junior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 36Whitesboro,NY,USA |
Your poem caused so many emotions to scatter across my soul in a matter of seconds.I'm rendered speechless.What a vivid and hopeless picture you present.You certainly have a gift. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you, Mark. That is high praise! ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Tara: Me too..:-(( I'm not violent but I swear I'd kill anyone I found harming a child or maim with everything I had in me.. HUGS sweetheart ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
For all it's worth as a father of two young beautiful girls, I hate this poem! It is well written... it could not be done better... thus the emotion you've created. It is a testiment to your talent and I commend you for your efforts. I pray never to have the means to write such things. I hate this poem and applaud you for it. |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Lines cut like an emotional knife...wounding with awful truth. Great work PAL ------------------ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Tara, I can only ditto the above on this! This is a terrible thing to happen, and so many emotions. You have done an excellent job of bringing that devastation out!  ------------------ God gave you two ears and one mouth...so you should listen twice as much as you talk. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Tara, Something similiar happened to someone very close to me. This was an is appalling act. I commend you on your courage not only in writing this piece but sharing it here with us. Dare I say "great poem". ------------------ Michael Anderson Loneliness isn't in being alone; Loneliness is alone in being. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Somehow I knew the moment I saw the title and had to wait a bit before replying. This "act" is repulsive and vile. Far too many of my friends or their children have endured similar cruelties. Raising awareness of this and issues like it is the main reason I write my verse. Well crafted piece. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Michael, no courage needed on my part, this is not about me. I'm thankful to say this is not about anyone I know personally. Dream, I'm so sorry that you know many people who've lived through this. Even one would be too many. ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Tara...what did I tell you?? Look at the responses and see for yourself. Wonderful job and I wish you all the luck with it. Hugs Ruth |
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