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Dawn Rising |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom 
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The shadows cast by dawn across the fields nearby such magic early in the morn a splendour I can't deny The quiet and the peace as this new day begins sheep with downy fleece blackbirds start to sing I love this early time when gentle thoughts cause minds to rhyme so many lessons taught Each blade of grass quivers in the wind raindrops shining like glass leaves floating undisciplined Even in these short few seconds the day has turned to light sleep my friends does beckon dreamily I turn out the light.... ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-26-1999).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very dreamy, RG. I enjoyed this!  ------------------ Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Soft and warm as a down pillow. Loved it, Rainbow.\ Michael |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
This is beautiful... I love this early time when gentle thoughts cause minds to rhyme so many lessons taught too tru, often is the night I find myself sitting here, realing, learning laughing and crying, only to find that time passes quickly, and before we know it, a new day dawns! Well done RG! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I would love to be in England to see a dawn like this! Your words captured the feeling like a painting! Wonderful, Rainbow!  |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
So picturesque (sp?), you know what i mean. I just have to have a BIG strong cup of coffee before I greet any dawn or anything else. I'd have to say this is one of your best. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A beautiful picture, Rainbow. I envy the eyes that look out upon such a sight. (I especially liked the line about the sheep) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
dsnyder: I'm holding off the magic for a while yet..:-))) HUGS Michael: the picture is soft, almost hazy as the mist gathers and grows in height..:-)) HUGS Chris: Dawn allows new perspectives HUGS PDV: Anytime, now is the time as the seasons change, the leaves turn to rust and fall, the lakes become colours of silver, currents running fast and slow, birds migrate....ooops, I got carried away with the magic.. HUSG Julie: Thank you. HUGS Balladeer: Ewe're thinking RAMdomly ... ooops...that's another thought that fleece into the night.*g* HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-26-1999).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
thought this beautiful, RG, ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I could picture this very clearly in my mind ------------------ Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same. Thank you all for leaving footprints!! |
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Scribe Junior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 14Capetown, South Africa |
the dream like quality of this piece is nicely twisted by your sleeping as dawn comes and turns night to day. i like it ------------------ "just another lost child, trying to find my way" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well done, RG. (Now if you can just keep those sheep safe from 'Deer and LJA! LOL) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Thanks all .. HUGS Suthern: That could be a hard task..*g* HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-27-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
beautiful RG, I love it when you describe your world to us, and you do it so beautifully..... |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
what a lovely visual....Rainbow I like this much........ ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RainbowGirl~ Perusing the archives .... This is lovely .... Miss you and your poetry~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
what beautiful pictures you paint in your poems |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cast by dawn... many neat lines, good piece |
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