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The Eternal Children |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
What happens to children grown old? Do they still exist,perhaps,in some other dimension of time or being? Are they still findable there- still laughing at clowns, screaming shrillily at summer splashes, shivering with blue lips that joyfully tremble with the newness of a first felt winters' snow coldness? Do they yet gush with beet redness from embarrasments of imagined dignities lost after running-falls or so very personal secrets revealed by the callousness of Big People who never understand? Do they yet,somewhere,steal away to their unknown hiding places high above or deep below the average plain where the Big People live? (that plain of plainess-playful not in deed or in thought- that of even headed dullness which waits for them- children dashing head longingly towards this inevitable future levelling) For they do fade from our view as yesterdays' light as tiny ships overwhelmed by oceans, precious seconds eaten up by clocks, devoured,they become memories. They no longer breathe among us, nor do they awake to new morning promises of sparkling adventures. But do they ever really cease to be? Such as these must live on yet in some secluded moss soft green, or sandy,oceanic,mist-filled Essential Place where smiles are instantaneous and heartfelt, where tears sprinkle moments with quick showers, watering all the life around them, summoning comfort,demanding love and then lulled to peace by the knowledge that they are small and completely deserving of absolute protection. For they must yet be as nothing which created such innocence would ever will it to end. Somewhere,all the children must still play their hide and seek. Somewhere,nearly motionless, little hands on tiny giggling mouths- they are hiding within us. ------------------ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This just leaves me breathless...I can't even count how many of your lines truly made me sigh...I've often wondered this myself....It's certainly a mystery, and worth the effort you've displayed here in wondering. Beautiful piece, deserving to go back to the top for others to enjoy. Thank you for taking me to this "place".....I truly enjoyed it. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Dear Femme,Thank you so much for responding to this and some other of my works.Was feeling that my writing style was not too much liked.Your words were greatly encouraging.Guess I'll have to post some more after all.Your comments expressed a true understanding of what I was trying to convey.Thank you again! ------------------ |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Hey Paul, great writing style - one of the best here at PinP in my opinion (hey, did you see that netpoets???)... I love this one very much. Unfortunately my time resource is not sufficient. I will read this again later to give a better evaluation, when I have the time! |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Thanks so much Artur... Paul ------------------ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Paul....I for one refuse to grow up  ------------------ Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same. Thank you all for leaving footprints!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Paul, I think pFF said it all, good style good poem enjoyed the read. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Paul, this is fabulous! Very well done! ------------------ Denise |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done and oh so true, there will always be a child in each of us. I'm 32 and at times I swear I feel 15. Great job!!..:.. ------------------ A hero is a man who does what he can. ~Isis~ (The Fragile Rose) |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Thank you for helping me remember the child in me, feelin' old today  . This was beautifully written. Do not doubt yourselfyou come across eloquently and with great style. I yet only hope to achieve. ------------------ Julie ------------------------- Thou who has given so much to me, give one thing more: a grateful heart. >George Herbert |
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graham Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 60South Yorkshire, England |
Ohhhh...you're just a big kid aren't you Paul? Meeeee tooooo!!!! And I don't ever want to grow up. Thanks for reminding me of that! ------------------ I always wanted an edible canoe but you can't have your kayak and eat it too! |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Really appreciate your comments-very much. Yep,I'm still a kid at heart-think all of us here hold onto that thread of sanity.After all ,compared to this old and gigantic universe,how can anyone really believe they are "grown up"and/or powerful? Thanks again No kidding, Paul ------------------ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Paul, I agree with Artur...you are one of the best....I always look forward to reading your work and I do not think I have missed a one since you started posting here.....this poem is one of my favorites loved the place you took me to...... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is a wonderful topic to write a poem about...and you did it brilliantly. Please don't ever think your style is not welcome here. I consider you among the most talented writers I have read because your poems are always quality. It is to my shame that I don't respond enough to those I admire. Things just move very fast sometimes. But I do read everything you do. ------------------ Great minds discuss ideals. Average minds discuss events. Small minds discuss people. |
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