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Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

0 posted 1999-09-21 07:38 PM

Men have made me what I am

Thanks to my father,
I was a daughter, not a son.
My brother made me a sister,
two kids instead of one.

I grew up and fell in love
wanted to share my life
So I married David,
and he made me his wife.

Our family was rather small,
we thought we needed another.
I gave birth to Philip
and he made me a mother.

I still wasn't happy,
I had one more need to meet,
And so I had Nicholas,
he made me complete.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 1999-09-21 07:50 PM

I absolutely love this one Tara...it's totally something different than I expected when I saw the title. Very good work and nicely stated

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

2 posted 1999-09-21 07:54 PM

Wowee!!!!...I adore this...You very lucky lady and don't you sound it as well....Bless you...you sound so alive!

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Julie
Senior Member

since 1999-08-20

Posts 739
Houston, TX

3 posted 1999-09-21 08:01 PM

This was excellent. I agree with hoot.
Title thew you off...don't consider
changing it cause it made it perfect.
It made me smile thru and thru.

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Julie
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..."to thine own self be true."
>William Shakespeare

DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-09-21 08:37 PM

I agree with this piece to a degree. 'Tis sad that you find your identity in others.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

5 posted 1999-09-21 08:41 PM

I think it great that you found the identity you wanted. It obviously makes you happy! Nice poem!

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member

since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

6 posted 1999-09-21 08:47 PM

I must agree...I did not expect the message of the poem to be what it was by the title. It is a great poem though...
Echo

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

7 posted 1999-09-21 09:22 PM

..and they all created someone we are very happy to have as part of us.

Tara Simms
Senior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

8 posted 1999-09-21 09:43 PM

Dream, then you miss the point entirely. How can any of us know who we truly are without acknowledging what others have given to us? I am merely thanking the important men in my life for their contribution.

To everyone else, thank you for your comments.

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Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching.

RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31

Posts 3023
United Kingdom

9 posted 1999-09-25 05:05 AM

I liked this so much the first time, I'm sending it back...

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-25-1999).]

johnt300
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since 1999-09-12

Posts 214
san diego, ca.

10 posted 1999-09-25 05:09 AM

Just a great little poem. Also like how the title threw me off. A gem.
Tyson

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

11 posted 1999-09-25 05:14 AM

Perfect piece, my friend..:..

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A hero is a man who does what he can.
~Isis~
(The Fragile Rose)

Tara Simms
Senior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

12 posted 1999-09-25 07:45 PM

RG, lol, feel free to reply as often as you'd like. I love having a fan!

Tyson, a gem? Wow! You are invited to read over all my work, if you're giving out compliments like that.

Isis, I think that's the first time the word "perfect" has been used to describe my poetry. Thank you!

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Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching.

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graham
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since 1999-07-31

Posts 60
South Yorkshire, England

13 posted 1999-09-25 08:20 PM

OK..I own up too...I expected a male bashing party!! I was pleased to be comletely wrong and also quite amused. Thanks for that Tara. I enjoyed your poem.

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I always wanted an edible canoe
but you can't have your kayak and eat it too!

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

14 posted 1999-09-25 10:38 PM

along with the others Tara, the title fooled me....your poem is a true delight....enjoyed this much.....

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

15 posted 1999-09-25 10:41 PM

A lovely tribute to the men in your life, Tara.

Michael

Tara Simms
Senior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

16 posted 1999-09-25 10:41 PM

All your comments are appreciated! This one came to me during a bout of insomnia 3 years ago.

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Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching.

Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/

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