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Winterwarm....a villanelle
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Winterwarm....a villanelle |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Winterwarm The hills are blanketed with snow, The wild geese have all flown south. Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The woods breathe deep, and hold their breath, The creeks and streams have ceased to flow; The wild geese have all flown south. I know a single winter truth The hibernating creatures know - Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The trees stand tall and meet their death While rabbits huddle close below; The wild geese have all flown south. You are the husband of my youth, The only comfort that I seek now - Whisper your warmth across my mouth. The lake is frozen hard as truth, The fish swim deep and sleep below. The wild geese have all flown south, Whisper your warmth across my mouth. © Beki (1990) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Excellent villanelle! ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
Villanelle of deepwinter, brilliantly embeshed with the heartfelt warmth of the ever-cold snow and ice. |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Beki, Beautiful poem. Very nostalgic, though I've never been there. Thanks for sharing. Tyson |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thanks Dream, Artur and John. I have always considered this poem my very best work...villanelles being as difficult as they are to pull off successfully :-) And that line..."whisper Your Warmth across my mouth" I know I wrote but honestly, and humbly, it just doesn't get any better than that! John, I have never been there either, except for a deep winter or two in my heart...I am born and raised southern California Beach kid! Hugs to you all.....:-) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent!! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"whisper your warmth across my mouth" What a line ... what a poem. I can see why you would consider this your best work ... I think any of us here would be proud to claim it ... Think I'll read this one again ... thank you for sharing. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love it - 'Tis truly a wonder vision of winter - and I dont' like being cold - the white part is OK though..... It seems that you have lines #1 and #2 juxtaposed... a typo, no doubt - It's a nice piece of work, my friend....  Nan |
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