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Love Lesson |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
When we were each others,hand holding hand, I held a contentment which paled all desires and I knew what peace was. Touching lips,breathing her into my soul, I was forever changed and I knew eternity was found within a present moment. Our bodies,when as one,acted out in form the formless unity of what we so intimately loved. When we were each others,I knew all worth knowing. I knew that which all else must only serve. ------------------ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Paul.....how very beautiful.....absolutely love this ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew......that one took my breath away. Nicely done Paul!! ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
have to bump this back up ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
"I held a contentment which paled all desires" What a wonderful claim. This is a lovely sentimental poem, Paul, though I think I would make a few small editorial changes to make it flow more smoothly..... won't though......it rings true the way it is! |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Thanks Hoot...I so well remember the inspiration for this poem and she took my breath away too! Pepper...Thanks for the kind words and the bump in the night. Beki...I know what ya' mean about the flow.It is a valid point.In this case though, I wanted the ideas themselves to be crystal-clear,hoping that they alone would provide the poetic raison d'etre.However,- I absolutely welcome such in-depth comments from you (et all)as they make for stimulating and helpful literary discourse. Do continue and thanks. Hugs to all, Paul ------------------ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Your words here are as if I had spoken them myself ! "Peace"...and "breathing her into my soul".....I've often referred to these phrases in my own poetry, and in real life. I do see true love as a peace, a calm, contentment. Those 3 are so hard to come by in this world which we live. So to me they are more precious than gold, silver, and rubies.....Thank you once again. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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