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The Keeper Of Keys
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 39


0 posted 1999-09-19 10:20 PM


The world spins round everyday
Each day passes farther and farther away
The last warming of my heart fades as well
And I'm left alone in love's dry spell
Just when I feel that it's been too long
And nobody cares to be a part of my song
I saw you dancing alone and quiet and still
I admired and watched and for you my heart began to will
Now I'm lost in your sweet essence
I hope you urn to be in my prescense
It's clear to me that you are in pain
You must feel like you yourself are completely in vain
Hurt no more for you deserve great bliss
Kiss me my princess, for I am your prince.

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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


© Copyright 1999 The Keeper Of Keys - All Rights Reserved
PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
1 posted 1999-09-19 10:33 PM


Keeper, this is a keeper. It's beautiful! Going from such disparaging sadness to a tremendous hope. It's great!

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Words lay dormant in the recesses of the mind til called forth to a labor of love. By WildChild


The Keeper Of Keys
Junior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 39

2 posted 1999-09-19 10:34 PM


Oh c'mon guys, no replies?

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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


The Keeper Of Keys
Junior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 39

3 posted 1999-09-19 10:36 PM


Thanks WildChild for your reply, it really means a lot. Isnt hope such a beautiful thing?

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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
4 posted 1999-09-19 10:36 PM


well, this certainly deserves replies!! Beautiful, beautiful work!!

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller


poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
5 posted 1999-09-19 10:58 PM


I can truly feel this ! That's about the way it goes - just about the time you think there is no hope...someone wonderful comes skipping by! And oh what a feeling to find a new love !! Truly can relate, and you captured the moment well....

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



searchingon
New Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 2

6 posted 1999-09-20 02:58 PM


The yearning was there, pushing through to the surface.
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 1999-09-20 05:12 PM


Keeper.....this is beautiful, I for one can certainly relate to it. Thanks for sharing!!!

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Beki
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
8 posted 1999-09-20 06:09 PM


Good poem, happy for you...and way envious because I am "wanting someone" too :-)
The Keeper Of Keys
Junior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 39

9 posted 1999-09-20 08:45 PM


Thanks everyone, i must say this is the most replies ive ever gotten. You are all so great. desire: such a tremendous thing...

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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
10 posted 1999-09-21 06:49 PM


What beautiful thoughts you have!!!
Sweet and sad all at the same time!!
Loved it!!

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"Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???"
Justbleu


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
11 posted 1999-09-21 06:53 PM


What a treasure Keeper! Something I think we can all relate to! Great job.
The Keeper Of Keys
Junior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 39

12 posted 1999-09-22 10:03 AM


Thank you again everyone, honestly. Life and love, such precious things...

I'm enjoying all of your posts people, keep it up...



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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


Toerag
Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
13 posted 1999-09-22 10:15 AM


Yo Keep....I too like this one....You're not a frog are ya?.....Just kidding....but sometimes ya gotta hop farther, ribbet louder, and shed a few warts before ya do indeed attract that princess to get a kiss. And all of us sometime in our life is at least a Prince or a Princess for a day!
DBeth
Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 110
providence,ky.42450
14 posted 1999-09-22 11:06 AM


I love it! Keeper you've done an excellent job with this one.I believe we have all been there at some point in our lives.Not being able to tell the one you want how you feel is very hard.Anyways...Good job!

DBeth

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When we give of ourselves
whole heartedly,it comes
back around ten fold.

moonmoon
Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277
TX , USA
15 posted 1999-09-22 01:42 PM



I agree with the rest..You have done justice to this feeling lot of us here share..

The Keeper Of Keys
Junior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 39

16 posted 1999-09-22 07:00 PM


I'm going for it guys, im giving it to her and im telling her how i feel. she deserves more than what shes got right now, i gotta make her smile.

here goes nothing


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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


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