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LUST.... fails...
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LUST.... fails... |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
Sparks at first glance Eyes grip and hold in a trance Touch ignites flickers at first chance Taken aback by that sexy stance Sparks and flickers grow to flames Great needs and fantasy desires Love taking on an incredible claim Starting and feeding flaming fires Every sight, every touch, every smell Flooding through the very love well Like sparkles and stars and witches spell Unexplained and highly infidel But strong and overpowering Like little tiny bee stings But with pleasure that happiness brings Like birds singing, and wanting bird wings BUT THEN... Flames being rained out Ultimately dying from a passion drought Rainy days try to hang about BUt will make way for sunny skies, here on out. ------------------ "If to rectify your demeanor, You must imitate another, Your philosiphy on morality Is a burden on your mentality, Your actions based on popularity, Will never fulfill you internally, Cuz the world was not blessed with equality, But rather with fake geniality. --823-- |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
i would like some comment on this one.. ------------------ "If to rectify your demeanor, You must imitate another, Your philosiphy on morality Is a burden on your mentality, Your actions based on popularity, Will never fulfill you internally, Cuz the world was not blessed with equality, But rather with fake geniality. --823-- |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
I had to read three times to catch all the points, but I think I have most of them. The topic is accurate, and the first three speak of lust obsession then the last stanza shows how pointless lust is without love. I'm sorry but my mind's weakening, getting tired (it's 2:36 a.m.!).. take care. [This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 09-21-1999).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
really well written with poinant points made.....very good Star Fairy ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I like this poem..Though it is 5:00A.M. and I have yet to sleep, so I am not thinking too clearly when it comes to typing or what I want to say. So I will leave it as great poem! |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
Thank you very much! |
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