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Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 1999-09-18 01:51 AM


Weep not for me, my loves, today
like a ship at see, I've sailed away
beyond the horizon, you see no more
perhaps to reach another shore.
Weep not for me, today, but go
accomplish things you should, but know
that I'll be pleased and there nearby
just listen closely, hear my sigh.
When oft my name, you should but call
I'll be there, loves, to break your fall
and listen to your tales of woe
then whisper that I love you so.
My life's been only good with you
around and near with love true blue
but now it's time to take my place
reserved for me in outer-space.

© Copyright 1999 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 1999-09-18 01:54 AM


Interesting....the rhthym and rhyme are very good in this piece, I myself loved it up to the last two lines, I think I would have liked to see it end a bit differently. Welcome to the group

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
2 posted 1999-09-18 01:58 AM


Thanks for the welcome. I am glad you liked it, although I am sorry you didn't like that last two lines =u)
Sean
Junior Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 17
Holtville, CA. USA
3 posted 1999-09-23 07:23 PM


WOW...I jsut read I think all the poems that have been posted by you Echo, and I have to say, they are wonderful, but I dont want to reply to all of them, because I dont want people to get sick of you hogging the top lol, but they are simply wonderful. Especially the ones on page 9, 10, 11, and 12 I think it is. Truly one of my favourite poets in here (no offense to any one else)! I think this one should be read so back up to the top it goes!
Artur Hawkwing
Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444
USA
4 posted 1999-09-23 07:33 PM


Some poetry you must take seriously, not lightly. Take this as an example.
WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
5 posted 1999-09-23 07:37 PM


I thought this was wonderful!
RainbowGirl
Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
6 posted 1999-09-23 07:44 PM


Echo

If *I* could make your world right
I would do so
If I could give you what you need
I would do so
If I could be what you need
I'd be that someone
but
I'm only me
You have to reach for me
and then I'm there
for you
but I was too late...

I'm so sorry!

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-23-1999).]

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