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Two Kindred Spirits ( a haiku sequence)
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Two Kindred Spirits ( a haiku sequence) |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Two Kindred Spirits Two kindred spirits Divided by one ocean - Warm winds trade kisses Kisses of summer wrapped up in pink paper The bow in her hair Hair flowing like water across her bare shoulders to tickle his hands Hands like fine leather That touch her like velvet and stop her sweet breath Breath of the nightwind That whispers to lovers drawing them closer Closer then skin is he murmers his passion against cheeks of satin Satin and leather they burn there together desire unfettered Unfettered as eagles they soar into heaven on bright wings of love Love carries them with it to conquer the ocean Two kindred spirits. © Beki (1999) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You have a talent! I have enjoyed your works that I have read. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
*sigh* yep that you do, that is beautiful, I don't have an ocean to conquere but your poem reminds me much of my hearts desire, who, btw, sometimes wears leather and I would rise and grow wings to be with in a heart beat and o&o you shush! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Nice to see you over here, Beki! I remember you from another forum.... this is a wonderful use of haiku... using the haiku as a stanza in a narrative type poem... each of the last words, the first words of the next haiku/stanza.... i really think you've done a great job with this! Looking forward to seeing you post more here, more often. -dp |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice, indeed - I like your sequential flow and the contiguity of the work as a whole - Keep 'em coming...  and, btw May I extend you an Open Welcome to the Forums...  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 09-16-99).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
ok beki, now I am jealous, I didn't get a butterfly kissed hello from nan....sheesh... of course I am not half the poet you are, but, I sure like it here and nan, don't mind me, I am just kidding, just complimenting beki again, I already made myself at home while you were away |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thanks everyone...Doreen, I remember you too, from Arcanum perhaps? Nan thanks for the beautiful welcome...and Iloveit....I really do appreciate all your nice comments. yep, I am defintiely going to like it here :-) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice...but a few of the stanzas do not fall into the haiku format of 5/7/5 syllable count ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Hoot....all haiku does not fall into the traditional 5-7-5......in fact there is a whole school of thought that believes because of the differences between our languages (Japanese and English) that 17 syllables in Japanese would translate more correctly into English as 13-14 syllables. Haiku is my spec-i-al-i-ty ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 09-16-99).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Haiku Master Beki! I'm not a very big fan of this style but this was wonderful. I'm going to have to add that one to my favorites as well as the other poem. ------------------ I fell in love and kept on falling |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Sensual,lovely,imaginative,gentle,passionate, beautiful PAL ------------------ |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you Paul, I recall admiring some of your work at arcanum......nice to see you here. :-) ------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very well written, Beki, very moving as well. Beautiful. Michael [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-17-99).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you very much Michael..it was an experiment in linked verse but I think it turned out rather well..:-) |
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