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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Before we get into the story, I want to say that this piece took forever for me to write. The story was always there but the words would not flow. I alologize for the sloppiness and roughness of this piece. It was all I could do just to write it. In finishing it I hope my muse has returned. She floated across the ballroom floor as if her feet never touched the ground. She was a vision in a black gown that flowed to her feet. Her blonde curls were bundled on top of her head and soft tendrils cascaded around her face. Her eyes glowed from the iridescent light of the room. The entire night had a mystical quality to it, to which Monique's beauty magnified. 'Twas New Years Eve; the beginning of a new year, a new century as well as a new millennium. Monique found a glass of Champaign to toast the new year as the minutes ticked away. She moved to the rear of the crowd as they moved to the middle of the ballroom for the awaited time. The clock struck midnight and the crowd cheered "Happy new Millennium"; a chorus of "Auld Lang Syne" began from the band. She closed her eyes and felt him there beside her even though he was so far away. In her heart she wished him a happy new year. When she opened her eyes she toasted the room; small pieces of silver confetti floated in the air, catching in her hair. She listened to the celebration around her; part of the crowd but yet separate. There were few that knew her heart but many that admired her. A small smile formed on her lips as she moved through the crowd; giving the ones she knew a new years kiss. She stopped at the cloak room to retrieve her wrap then stepped out into the night. She strolled homeward; the chill night air was enticing and she lived only a few blocks from the grand hotel. She drew in a deep full breath of the crisp night air and pulled her wrap tightly around her. It was a bitter sweet night for Monique, the joy and celebration of the occasion, yet she did not share it with the one in her heart. As she walked she listened to the sounds of a city in party mode. There was laughter and music in the air; with each block the music changed but the sounds of celebration remained the same. She smiled at the happiness she heard as she neared her home. Glancing up she noticed something on her stoop. She could not make it out because of the distance but something was there. She picked up her pace slightly as her curiosity peeked. As she drew closer the object became recognizable, it was a bouquet of roses. Confusions flashed across her pretty features and her pace slowed. From the shadows stepped a figure in a tuxedo, tall, dark and handsome. Tears formed in her eyes; she knew instantly who he is. Somehow he had made it to her for this special night. The smile beamed from his eyes "Happy New Year my love." He whispered as he drew her into his arms. Never had she felt so complete, so loved and so safe. "How where you able to be here Jake? I am so happy that you made it." She sighed into his neck. "It is a long story my sweet and one I will tell you later." With that he lifted her face to his and kissed her lips softly, gently, passionately. When he pulled his lips from hers he suggested putting the roses in some water so that they might enjoy the rest of this magical evening. Once the roses were safely deposited into a vase of fresh water they ventured into the night. Into the celebration of a new year; a new millennium; a new life......together. [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 01-08-2000).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Ah....I love a happy ending!  Wonderful imagery here Marilyn....I was right there and felt Monique's emotions all the way through.... I really enjoyed reading this piece.. Well Done!!! So happy to hear that your muse has returned and I'll be looking forward to your next work!!!< !signature--> A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
*sobbing and sighing here* Well girl, you went and did it with this piece. You touched my heart and the born romantic in me very deeply. I thought back to my wish, back in July to spend my New Years with a man who cared about me...well, my dreams didn't exactly come true, but I did have the priveledge to ring it in with a few friends here online. Anyway, I'm glad your muse is back and wonderful piece of prose |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Marilyn! I think your writer's block is cured! Beautiful story! Denise |
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Grandma Jo Member
since 2000-01-02
Posts 51 |
Great stuff Marilyn, but then I am beginning to realize that my Daughter-in-law is quite remarkable at many things. Always enjoy your writing! Love always, Jo [This message has been edited by Grandma Jo (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Jo...oh Jo!! It is so good to finally see you registered here. As soon as I saw the handle I knew it was you. It is so good to have you Grandma. ((HUG)) Welcome to Passions and get posting dome of your great work!! To the rest of my friends here...thankyou for you praise with this piece. I am not happy with the finished product but considering it has take so long to write so few words I am satisfied. Ruth...What would I do with out you my friend? You are so very precious to me. |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
I enjoyed this piece, Marilyn, I especially like the ending. Very emotional, Thanks for posting this, looking forward to seeing more works In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
i so hope that this was non-fiction, and that such a picturesque new years occured somewhere. what a touching story. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Very well done!!! Emotion so real it jumped off the screen. I too hope that this happened for somebody on that magical night. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very well written Marilyn and such a perfect ending to romance--just the way we all want it to happen. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Uhh, Marilyn...you're doing it again...sigh. I was there on New Years, with my heart empty of the one I wished to be with. If only a happy ending for me. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I do truely hope this happened to someone on that magical night. Chris...I know exactly what you are saying. I too was alone on new years eve, longing for that one special person. Someday my friend we will see our hearts full. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful writing, Marilyn, and the theme that love is out there and happy endings are possible to those who believe is very refreshing...and important. My best to you!! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Marilyn, I'm so glad I read this, eventhough I was "late". LOL Loved this story from the first 'til the last word. I think I even forgot to breath. : ) |
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tuffluv66 Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 121Iowa, U.S.A. |
I love it. Seems like there is a connection here,but with 11 years in between. lol |
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