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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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Relationship- Remember the start. The butterfly in the stomach, the knot in your throat. Remember the good times- The annual celebration of your meeting. The renewing of your vows to be committed to each other. Remember the bad times – The displeasure of having different opinions. The headache from putting up with the other person for the sake of being in their company. Remember the end. Today was planned long time ago. Something beyond each of your control. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
An excellent synopsis. And if one could do just that in the heat of the moment? Aspirin would find a reduction in sales. Well done. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Enjoyed. Hits all too close to home right now, but enjoyed nonetheless  and then He created the horse... |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I love the conclusion of this piece. It's short and biting. I wonder if you might lengthen this and add still more "evidence" of the conclusion that is to come. But don't be too heavy with that evidence lest this piece become more cynical. Say, were you thinking of tragedy as you wrote this? It sounds rather fatalistic, like a tragedy....or perhaps a synopsis of one. Life is a play, perhaps? Check out "Reality?" by Chika for something like this. There the protagonist weaves the story. Here you're taking the protagonist and weaving the story with her own life experience. Thanks for the chance to read and reply. Any idiot can see that the result is true. |
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