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Passions in Prose

not sure what to call it

Christioned
Member

since 2004-01-15

Posts 93
Huddling in the dark

0 posted 2005-11-14 08:00 PM

This is a song that's been in my head a while, I hope that it's okay. The bridge needs help.

Verse 1:
As a child,
you were a stranger
the one I couldn't possibly touch
you were distant
only a ghost
now you haunt me
with a cold hard touch

Chorus:
So tell me what did I do
tell me what did I say
to make you stop
and just walk away
So is this the end
is this how it should be
should I just let you go
or hold on to your memories

Verse 2:
So now I am grown
and you're still not here
you're like the distant shadows
that still linger here
your memories are like
my bad dreams
and they won't stop replaying

Bridge:
All I ever wanted
was for you to notice me
all I ever wanted
was for your love

Chorus:

"See my wrists;
I feel your pain."-Creed

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2005-11-23 01:29 AM

I know nothing about song writing. But your pain in a broken trust and relationship is very apparent. Peace.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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