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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The knock...so out of place there. For Bill had few visitors. The McCalls would call occasionally, but few others ever stopped by. Working alone, a poet by emotion, a writer by trade...Bill spent most of his time in thought. Time did not allow many visitors to this abode where words soared through the warm cottage air. Rushing hurriedly to the door, pulling it open... Somewhat disappointed to find the Fedex package sitting on the porch...another manuscript being returned....was it accepted? Or...was this yet another one of those accepted rejections, for they far outnumbered those that became published. Afraid to leave just yet, but knowing that certain errands must be run, Bill hesitantly scurries out the door, destination a small town on the edge of earth’s horizon...Calamity.... An odd name for such a tranquil setting, for things moved very slowly there....this place where everyone was a neighbor and Mrs Peabody knew everything. Gossip flourished where the bustle and hustle took a back seat to porches and RC cola... Seventy miles an hour, the front end of a truck past it’s prime dancing like a school girl’s rear....Bill headed west toward town.....Headlights could be seen miles away in the darkness which fell silently upon a sparse landscape.... Uneventful, this trip to Calamity, as had been the last hundred or so over the past twenty years. Bill always thought that he could just set a brick on the gas and let the truck do the rest.... Was she married? The thought just jumped out of his mind, peaking his curiosity. If only he had stayed.... Groceries, gas, a few reams of paper. A copy of the nearest metropolitan paper....he so enjoyed the editorials. How tall are they? Wondering about the children...certainly adults now. When is their birthday? He knew they shared that....easier on candles and cake....chuckling at the thought. Something odd caught his attention as he walked through the country store....the smell of a perfume that Mary Lou had always worn. Surely, fate would not have brought them both there? Bill stopped, walked from aisle to aisle, slowly looking, hesitating long enough to ensure a blind spot was covered...Then... standing with her back turned... It was the legs...no one had those legs but Mary Lou..... Heart jack hammering away within the screaming walls of his chest, he walked hesitantly down the aisle... until he was behind her.... “Mary Lou?”.... Raising her head slightly, she turned....their eyes met... They knew....time momentarily stood still....as years washed away and two young lovers met once again.... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Barry... You must write in the overhead fan if you are intending this much intensity... I believe you might have the makings of a best seller my friend. TD |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Amazing! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ My, my ... this is really very good~ It piqued my intrest all the way through ... yet, I feel there may be 'more' ? Whatever you do ... if there is ... do NOT let me miss it~ You have a wealth of talent sir ...~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just finished four and five... incredible...just a wonderful story you have blessed us with Barry... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful story, my friend... and told so well. *S* |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
finished reading 5 and was looking for 6. Please tell me this story is not complete yet. Definately a captivating story. You have done an excellent job and I hope you will continue captivating my interest! pictureme :-) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling at you... |
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