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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
There are times, when the sky splits from the weight of stars and out tumbles all the feelings hidden behind the dark lining of heaven. I stood on the balcony, looking out to sea in watch of nothing, but in hope of seeing more than I knew how to absorb through my eyes alone. The faint light on the horizon grew as a ship, probably a pleasure craft out for an evening cruise, came close to shore. I focused on how it moved trying not to look into the sky or myself to see what might tumble out in fiery fall if I dared glance any higher than the surface. “Tell me,” I asked “ about the sea.” You looked at me in puzzlement for a minute then smiled and simply told me,” I don’t know anything about the depth and can only say what I have seen on the surface.” I just nodded and turned to stare outwards. Away from you, in hopes you would not see the water of my eyes or hear my sigh as I thought of the days and nights to come. It was later, much later after good byes and after the empty had begun to crawl back inside that I thought about how unfair my own desires and demands were. I made the mistake then, of looking up at the sky and saw the streak of fire cross from one side of the horizon to the other. Heaven split, as it is apt to do at times and out poured all the things trapped in me for so many years. They just fell out. Piling themselves in front of me like so much garbage dumped by a cosmic janitor. A bit of bright here, and putrid hurt there, festered parts rolling in a disgusting trail down the heap to suddenly be still. All I could do was pick them up. One at a time and study them in all their imperfection, because there are times, when the sky splits from the weight of stars and these bit of star were mine. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There are times, when the sky splits from the weight of stars and out tumbles all the feelings hidden behind the dark lining of heaven. ==================== All I could do was pick them up. One at a time and study them in all their imperfection, because there are times, when the sky splits from the weight of stars and these bit of star were mine. ===================== Perhaps it is the poet in me... or more so the poetry of your words (and the effect they have on me) that makes me want to say something profound right now to define to you how much this write touched me (and reflected me) but at the moment nothing I can come up with touch that opening line, or the intention of this inspire... so instead I'll just thank you for the starshine...and you will just know the rest. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
My sky seam seems to crack and only let a few bits of star out. I wish it would split and let me deal with it all once and for all... Thank you for not letting me miss this...one question...did she ever see the depth or does she continue to only see the surface? Susan |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
This, I know. well done, Captain.  Sunkissed. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No words... admiration... but no words... |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is so beautiful it brought a tear to my eye. Thank you. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow, this is just grand!  The images that you brought to my mind by this are still there... absolutely beautiful. Thank you for the read Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...Janet Marie always says it best....so I'll just offer a hug! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Your prose as well as poetry touches deeply. This my favorite of thoughts/lines: "But in hope of seeing more than I knew how to absorb through my eyes alone." All I can say is may you when the time is right and she join you in that depth. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Wow! So much depth offered from the sky in a way I've never considered. So much to consider and always the hope. Very well done. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Ron, wow, i wish i have the words to do this justice...what a gorgeous read! your opening line delighted me and Pat's favourite line as copied below made me wish i have written it myself.. There are times, when the sky splits from the weight of stars and out tumbles all the feelings hidden behind the dark lining of heaven. but in hope of seeing more than I knew how to absorb through my eyes alone. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you.. one and all for takng time to read and comment. I'm glad there was something in this you could enjoy or relate to... Sometimes the words are enough to weigh down the heart and then at others the words are inadequate for even explaining the tip of what happens to us... this particular time... the words just are... and without judging them or their effectiveness in saying what was being felt and thought I'll just say they stand to mark a moment and an experience. One I'll now file away... with other bits of star..and sky... until the seams split again. |
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