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Sing a Song of Sixpence
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Sing a Song of Sixpence |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Sing a Song of Sixpence When I was a child, I spoke like a child All Mother Goose and Dr. Seuss I reasoned like a child, I loved like a child. I can hear the blackbirds sing . . . With first blood came first love The kiss of a maid and her king We danced by the light of the moon. The trickling of the glass' sand Modesty and decency hand in hand The dish ran away with the spoon. "I am everything you want I am everything you need. I am everything inside of you That you wish you could be I say all the right things At exactly the right time But I mean nothing to you And I don't know why." -"Everything You Want" Vertical Horizon |
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Trevor Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 700Canada |
Very playful poem, reminded me of a large book of fairy tales I once had.... and still have somewhere dusty. I liked the poem, even the references (which I'm usually against) fit in beautifully. The only part that didn't seem to fit was "With first blood/Came first love". Maybe I'm not totally up to date on my Nursury Rhymes but I didn't see how it fit. Any elab. would be helpful cause right now when I read that part I can't stop thinking of RAMBO, First Blood....sorry but it's the truth, but besides those two lines, which may or may not fit, I really enjoyed this poem and thought you ended it well. Thanks for the read, take care, Trevor |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Wendy: This was an interesting poem. Lines 1 and 4 are unmistakenly references to 1 Corinthians 13. I thought that would end up being the skeleton of your poem and the lines in between would flesh out a clever application. Lines 2 & 3 seem to be just this. While I enjoyed what followed I suppose I wasn't prepared for the detailed elaboration on Line 4 that followed. But the effect was still positive. I also don't know about "With first blood/Came first love". "Blood" and "love" are near rhymes and preserve your rhyme scheme but I, like Trevor, think of Rambo when I see "first blood". I thought that the last three lines were wonderfully written, by the way. I enjoyed it. Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
"First blood/first love" is a sexual allusion... of a rather virginal nature. (Its supposed to be ambiguous.  ) -wen |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
oh I loved this! Wen-This is great. Its light but sings of becoming..WOW! EXTREME KUDOS! "and the dish ran away with the spoon" that moment of awakening is gone with that touch?...Beautiful layers! |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Thanks! -wen |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
This is lovely and, I'm sure you know, you could probably add much more. Please, never put away all your childish things. |
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Buffpimp Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 39 |
When I started to read this, the first thing that popped into my mind was Green Eggs and Ham and Cat in the Hat. This is very entertaining and fun to read. IT is better than those monotonous love poems that I always write . And when I first started to read it, IT sounded more and mroe like a Nursery Rhyme. Keep it up. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Hi Wendy .. I'm Jimbane ... lol or Philip with one ell. I see Jim got here before me and said exactly what I told him to say which means that I don't have to say it again .. all I have to do it reiterate what the others thought about this being a fun poem with a kind of serious side hidden away there (ie the Biblical refs and the loss of innocence and virginity) .. Nice work Philip |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Wow. I never thought this would have so much response. You all made me appreciate this one a lot more than I did. Thanks! -wen"I am everything you want I am everything you need. I am everything inside of you That you wish you could be I say all the right things At exactly the right time But I mean nothing to you And I don't know why." -"Everything You Want" Vertical Horizon |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Wendy, I loved this! A unique spin on an old theme ...fresh, matter-of-fact, and just a bit flip. Good work...keep it up. Kristine |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Wendy, Well, here I am late again. Got to start getting up earlier. And I see that Philip passed my instructions on to Jim and then claimed them as his own. Naughty boys, but what can one expect. An excellent job of imbedding a serious side into a seemingly light-hearted poem. Congratulations, one cannot help but read it more than once. Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
wendy- i really love your use of child-like images in here. this is a really great poem. no need to elaborate really, i think it's pretty clear. |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
Thank you! You're sure there's nothing I should do to it? (make sure, before I send it off to this official thing...) -wen |
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