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Mammy Fate Bakes Cake
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Mammy Fate Bakes Cake |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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When Mammy Fate rolls into my kitchen, pulls on that tall white hat, I know- I'm in for something sweet. She came today. Everybody's grand- mother dream. Flour sugar, and salt; Neatly tucked in brown paper sacks. Eggs stacked, fresh, in the carpet bag at her feet. We sat for hours. Spooning honey in amber tea. Spoke of finer things (like love) that Mammy Fate had come to bake. Today, my residual child resolved and pressed face to forearm. Smiled as her whip wound and whirled a mojo batter. Smooth. She poured the thickest blend of freshest white. Laced rich, with deep- dark chocolate hue and then she let me have the spoon. When Mammy Fate bakes cake, its sweet. But, when you get to lick the batter, its definitely better. ~haze < !signature--> "I shall leave nothing before matchsticks." [This message has been edited by haze (edited 01-26-2000).] |
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Hawk183 Member
since 1999-12-24
Posts 130 |
Wonderfully done Haze, This poem brought a smile  to my face and a good mood to my day...a very rare achievement lately...thank you!Hawk |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Haze, Nice to see ya! Great piece of work you wrote here. I love the "residual child", and licking the spoon ... getting that sweet extra. Fate must to be good to you of late. If so, congrats. Excellent poem, Haze warmhrt |
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J.L. Humphres Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 201Alabama |
haze, Where ya been? I really dug this one. I could almost hear a beat. The soft thump of a stand-up bass, a snare drum, accompanying a muted trumpet. This one was laid down smooth. Loved it. J.L.H. Jason I...I have seen the best minds of my generation... --Allen Ginsberg |
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jenni Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 478Washington D.C. |
haze-- absolutely wonderful; rich, sensuous, and oh so delicious. very, very nice piece here, excellent work. "please ma'am, i'd like some more." jenni |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
HAZE IS BACK!!! This is very well done. The spoon IS much better than those electric mixer blades. I could never get all the batter off that middle post ... so frustrating! But I know this isn't about dear old gramma baking a cake (Mammy "Fate" did make it a little obvious ... so un-Haze-like). I would prefer to have to work more for meaning but I suppose I am also a bit odd in that way. Thanks again for a good read. When's will your next confection be done? Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
This is a delightful confection you've given birth to here Ms. haze. Your EZ-Bake mind is an amazingly versatile and talented wonder. If I didn't know better -- I'd swear you were tapped into a vein of pure cosmic gold! I really love this one!  |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
A very enjoyable poem with great character, makes me want to get out those mixing bowls, especially on this icy winter storm day. |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
mojo batter??? i love it. this is really great. the pictures of the amber tea, the several times described batter. it's really great, haze. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Nice work haze. It sounds like something good has come your way. But this makes a very good poem reading it literally, without making any attempt to decipher its meaning. But Jim, It's not the center post that makes the spoon better. Its the way that mixer catches your tongue between the blades as it whirrs them around and around. Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Hi Haze Unlike the rest of my esteemed friends I haven't got a clue what "mojo batter" is, I hate raw cake mix, and I don't like sweet tea .. all of which kinda leaves me free to worry about just what on earth this is all about . Certainly it was compelling. Also infuriating (like Silk Tigers), with the most difficult passage for me at least being:"Today, my residual child resolved and pressed face to forearm." I remain convinced that there's some deep sensuous even erotic goings on here, and even if you tell me there's nothing of the kind I won't believe you .Philip PS I also loved the Ping Pong poem btw .. sorry i didn't get to it .... |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
My friends... I owe you all a long email. There were some things going on that have (I hope) been abated. So at last, perhaps I can breathe again without lying low in deep cover. The situation was ultimately (in real time harmless) but was a very HUGE pain when I was online. I guess it doesn't really matter if I just tell you that I was being web-stalked through my poetry links on one of my sites. I assumed and identity (she's here) so I could post and interact without (some wise-ass guy) making rude and insinuating comments (all untrue BTW-not that it matters). I think this person has been laid to rest. So I am back and happy to be out among my friends again! Thanks for your patience with this absence. Philip- mojo is down-home magic... and "I remain convinced that there's some deep sensuous even erotic goings on here, and even if you tell me there's nothing of the kind I won't believe you " (You are right) That's what made this poem so much fun...it seemed so innocent...like an inner child watching an old lady bake cake...at 38-still waiting to lick the spoon. AH!-But you have caught on, even for lack of mojo-faith! Grand Kudos My Friend-I have missed you much! ******************************************** And to all my friends... A BIG WARM HUG and thank you's...I'm Back and missed you much! Now...who's gonna guess which alter-ego was posting for Haze? *S* *ROFL* I'll give you a clue...She was female, she posted about 3 poems here, and my next post will be the real deep clue. Til Again (and real soon) ~haze |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
No stop.... dont post the clue .. I know I just need a few minutes .. i guessed the other day actually .. gimme 15 Back in a mo (jo) P GOTCHA .... Desert Jana ..heh heh "Absolutely Beautiful! This is an extremely well crafted work! Strong Kudos!" who else would post THAT !!!! And now it occurs to me that we should all be covered with embarrassment and mortification as most of us (kudos to Hawk and Wordshaman) failed miserably to pounce upon and applaud Ms Jana's work  [This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 01-28-2000).] |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Philip... I'll be waiting *L*. I must tell you though (some one) had guessed at the very first post so...I guess its like you'll get 2nd prize *S* ~haze paces...thinking of a prize...hmmm Later my friend...still haze paces. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Haze Scroll up to my earlier post, and btw you have mail (sorry to hear about your problems .. and really glad your back ~smile~) P |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Got your mail my friend! You WIN! Thank you for the fine welcome back and further for the sweet compliments...*S* ~haze Ps...Just so you know...it was not someone in any forum at PIP... |
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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
i'd love to say it's great to see you again, but i'm new so i don't have the privilege, but now you've given me the task of going and looking at not one, but two different lists of poems i have missed i extremely enjoyed this one and am happy to have had the pleasure to meet mammy fate in all of her confections just another twice invisible boy To Be, contents his natural desire, He asks no Angel's wing, no Seraph's fire; Alexander Pope, "An Essay On Man" |
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