»
Archives
»
Critical Analysis #1
»
Dream Come True
| Critical Analysis #1 |
|
Dream Come True |
|
|
Holden Junior Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 26Brighton East, Victoria, Australia |
You are like a dream come true Ever time I think of you You're like no one I've ever met To you I've left my heart in debt The way you make me feel is special More beautiful than any precious metal Just ask and I'll always be here But if you don't I will not fear Because our love is quite strong And I know it will last long So if you listen to me now I'll express my love and how I plan on treating you the best Loving you without the mess I feel as if I'll awaken If you're gone I will be shaken You are my dream that has come true I hope you know I'll always love you 'I once picked a daisy's petals searching for an answer. I went through 10 daisy's before getting the answer I was looking for...I love you.' |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Jared - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Hawk183 Member
since 1999-12-24
Posts 130 |
Holden, I think this poem is very sentimental...it would make a good Valentine present. Since coming to Passions I have shyed away at this type of rhyme...I often find myself concentrating more on finding words to rhyme than really making the poem unique. However, I like this poem...it has emotion and a very clear statement. Hawk p.s.-"I plan on treating you the best loving you without the mess" The ryhme hear is a bit forced...maybe you could say "loving you above the rest.." Justa thought!Thanks for the read.  |
||
|
haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
I have to agree completely with Hawk, this would be a truly beautiful Valentine. Lovely Work Poet...Lovely |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
