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Kevin Taylor
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since 1999-12-23
Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada

0 posted 2000-01-14 08:58 PM


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Members of the Jury...

It was a drive-by versing
A poem invasion
An act of irresponsible aesthetics
Unmitigated form and passion
Premeditated meter
Alliteration
Aggravated by both rhythm
And rhyme

It was a drive-by vision
A prose inversion
A wilding of fact and fantasy

By all accounts
A Declaration of Words



 Kevin

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patchoulipumpkin
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 196
Bermuda
1 posted 2000-01-14 09:58 PM


YEs!!, great, i love this, its wonderful.  I was laughing, i wrote a similar poem myself regarding free verse and the more traditional forms of poetry.  However, it wasn't done with as much focus as your own.  Great.
poetry_kills
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-01-14 11:02 PM


kevin: i really like this one... i doubt i picked up half of the legal allusions in my reading, but the ones i did gather in my haste were very clever... *ugh* my roomate layed his dirty socks on my Twizzlers *argh*, but you didn't want to hear that... anyway, i can actually see in my mind's eye a lawyer with slicked-back hair and a bad suit delivering this speech to a jury... bravo  

these twizzlers taste funny,
**jerome the boy with no brain

John Foulstone
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 100
Australia
3 posted 2000-01-15 07:23 AM


Watch out, Kevin. Alliteration by the bucketful, and good use of meter. If you accidently rhymed, you might get ejected from the free verse club. Great poem.

 It's never too late to have a happy childhood ...

haze
Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA
4 posted 2000-01-15 11:18 AM


Must be a poem...Great work as always...
(This should be a spoken piece)
Meter Rhythm & Declaration
Warrants Standing
OVATION!


~haze

J.L. Humphres
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 201
Alabama
5 posted 2000-01-15 02:03 PM


Kevin,
  I agree with haze about this being a spoken piece. The humor and character really shine through in this format,but the real impact would come out in a reading. Good poem either way.
                  J.L.H.
                    

 Jason
I...I have seen the best minds of my generation...
--Allen Ginsberg

Kevin Taylor
Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185
near Vancouver, BC, Canada
6 posted 2000-01-15 02:41 PM


I actually read it with a bullhorn on the courthouse steps in protest when the city decided to charge street artists $100 for the privilege of being poor.



 Kevin

jenni
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since 1999-09-11
Posts 478
Washington D.C.
7 posted 2000-01-15 07:25 PM


"premeditated meter"... LOL
wonderful phrase, great piece.  thanks for posting it here for us.

jenni

Kirk T Walker
Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 357
Liberty, MO
8 posted 2000-01-15 11:13 PM


The court finds Kevin Taylor GUILTY!!!  Wonderful poem.  Genius.  
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 2000-01-15 11:43 PM


Kevin...this poem is absolutely too creative in nature for me to look past that and find fault in it. How do you ever come up with this stuff? Oh, by the way, the flow is great!
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